The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper in Masontown:
“If we want to save money on municipal garbage disposal fees, we need to encourage our residents to recycle more. Late last year, our neighboring town, Hayesworth, passed a law requiring that all households recycle paper and glass, or pay a fine. Since that time, Hayesworth has seen its garbage disposal costs significantly decrease. If we implemented an advertising campaign encouraging our residents to recycle, Masontown would also save money on disposal of its waste.”
The letter urges to implement an advertising campaign to encourage residents of Masontown (M) to recycle. The writer implies that this action would save money on disposal of its waste and presents several points in support of the statement. This arument may seem correct but it is flawed with several fallacies.
At first, it is said that to save money on municipal garbage disposal fees, residents need to be encouraged to recycle more. But, no supporting information is provided that can prove that this action alone will save money on garbage disposal. Maybe Masontown's garbage collection and disposal plan is already worldclass and there's little scope for cost reduction.
To serve the argument, the author stated facts about Hayestown(H). This city passed a law requiring all households recycle paper and glass otherwise citizens have to pay fine. Since, that time Hayestown's garbage disposal cost significatly decreased. But, it is mentioned nowhere that whether the law was implemented or not. Just passing a law doesn't mean that it's being implemented. Even if the law is implemented strictly, it's also not ensured that only and only this action lead to reduction in disposal cost.
The writer states that Town H implemented law regarding paper and glass recycle. Maybe those are the most common waste. But, those may not be common in Town M. Town M might be an industrial city with little or no recyclable waste. It may also happen that it's consensus is too low that it produces little amount of garbage and implementing recyling facility may actually increase cost.
Another flaw of the argument is the writer is advocating about advertising campaign to encourage residents to recycle. But, the advertising campaign may fail entirely. It might be necessary and only way to implement law to encourage recycling.
Recycling might be a wonderful way to solve the waste dispoosal problem but it may not be always cost effective. To convince me about initiating advertising campaign, the writer need to present evidence that people of Town M is conscious and by only that advertisement campaign, they will be encouraged to recycle and no laws needed to be implemented. I need further proof that recycling cost will not increase the total cost of garbage management in Town M. The writer also should present solid evidence regarding amount of recyclable waste produced in Masontown.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 1960 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.013 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.722 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.773 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.931 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'implementing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: implementing
The letter urges to implement an advertising campaign to encourage re...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...disposal plan is already worldclass and theres little scope for cost reduction. ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 175, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ss otherwise citizens have to pay fine. Since, that time Hayestowns garbage disposal ...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 342, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... implemented or not. Just passing a law doesnt mean that its being implemented. Even i...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 423, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ven if the law is implemented strictly, its also not ensured that only and only thi...
^^^
Line 13, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t Town H implemented law regarding paper and glass recycle. Maybe those are the m...
^^
Line 17, column 84, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is advocating about advertising campaign to encourage residents to recycle. But, ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, regarding, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 390.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17179487179 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77511364682 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479487179487 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4001891702 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0416666667 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08333333333 5.70786347227 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170215970238 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054070286673 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652856165665 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101912715795 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675381843271 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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