The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper."Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participatedin youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injur

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.

"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated

in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for

a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological

pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that

long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities.

Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized

athletic competition for children under nine."

The letter to the editor of the Parkvelle Daily newspaper advocates for the discontinuation of

organized athletic competition for children under nine. The author argues based on dome facts i.e. it

causes injuries, exerts psychological pressure thus causes harm to voth physical and mental health.

Furthermore the author insists that it has deleterious effect on academic activities too. Though

concerns of the auther is legit, I can't completely agree that these evidences are enough for the

discontinuation of the competition.

Firstly, although the number 40000 represents a large number, no data has been provided which can

assure that this number actually represents a large proportion of the participants. Maybe this

number doesn't represent even one percent of the participants. Another information I would like to

know is about the types of injuries and the ratio of minor and major injuries. Even if the number of

injuries represent a significant proportion of the participants, there is no such proof that those

injuries are more than barely some bruies which is regular occurance in almost every noncompetitive matches too.

Secondly, exertion of psychological pressures by coaches and parents shouldn't be a cause for

discontinuation of a competition. Coaches and parents account for this problem. They should create

friendly environment for inspiring children into sports and they should be made concious about this

fact. There is no information about size and nature of the sample set too.

Moreover, education experts claim of taking time away by practice sessions that could be used for

academic activities is flawed. There is no substantiation presented in the letter supporting the claim

that the time used by practice sessions would be used for academic purposes. It is possible and

common now a days that children are procastinating on video games. So, it is entirely possible that

time allocated for practice sessions may be used for much more harmful activities rather that using

for studies.Even if the education experts concern is substantiated, it is not enough for cancellation of the

organization of the competition. Time of training sessions can be regulated by the authority based

on experts' prescription. It may also possible that most of the institutions only have short sessions.

All the logics relating to the argument presented in the letter may create concern among the

parents. But I would like to have more extensive data relating to the injuries and the nature of the

practice sessions in most of the institutiions. Actually, discontinuation of such competition may

divert children from sports and lead to serious health concerns like obesity. For these reasons, I am

not yet convienced that the competition should be interrupted despite the intimidatiting

informations provided by the author.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54382022472 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12690795183 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483146067416 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9902727702 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.136363636 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2272727273 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31818181818 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 30.0 5.15768463074 582% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0604826867058 0.218282227539 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0187707550882 0.0743258471296 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273485123883 0.0701772020484 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.016974863891 0.128457276422 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261925986636 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 46 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2348 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.241 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.046 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 9.739 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.306 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.304 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.203 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.762 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.022 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 30 5