The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
The argument appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager predicts that to increase their profits ever more dramatically they should modify showerheads to restricts water flow throughout all twelve reported buildings. However, author fails to answer some questions which are necessary to conclude that prediction is acceptable or not.
All the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be one month ago. These raise many questions. How it will help to reduce more water? If they have twelve buildings then one building can waste more water. Author should provide details on how these will increase their profit dramatically. If these buildings have not waste much water, then how will it increase overall profit. Thus, author should answer about condition of these three buildings.
Moreover, actual readings of water usage before and after are not available. So to predict that change increase profit will not proper. How they assume that change will surely increase saving? Author should provide information on what are the other readings of water usage to before and after change. Author's assumption needs more strong evidence to consider that change will result into considerable savings. They pay for water every month. So to assume that this will surely increase savings is not proper. Thus, they should provide details on whether there is reduction in bill or not.
There are some complaints about low water pressure except that there are no other problems with showers after adjustment. These raise many questions. How it will not increase problems when few complaints are already reported in few buildings? If only few buildings are modified and there is low pressure problem occurred, then all buildings may increase more problems. So, author should provide details on how much complaint occurs and if adjustment are done one month ago, then why there are few complaints of low pressure. Thus, author fails to provide accurate details and strong evidence to support his argument.
To sum up, there are many flaws which suggest that prediction of owner of Sunnyside Tower apartment complex lacks to provide strong evidence. There are many questions which is necessary to answer on how prediction will increase profits.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not right on the point.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 1963 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.125 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.415 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.32 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.103 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.52 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.491 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... How it will help to reduce more water? If they have twelve buildings then one bui...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, third, thus, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26109660574 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47622842592 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446475195822 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.3458859111 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.32 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.68 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255744823691 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694547438276 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134999947388 0.0701772020484 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165484465715 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110306208661 0.0628817314937 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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