The following is a letter that recently appeared in the Oak City Gazette, a local newspaper.
"The primary function of the Committee for a Better Oak City is to advise the city government on how to make the best use of the city's limited budget. However, at some of our recent meetings we failed to make important decisions because of the foolish objections raised by committee members who are not even residents of Oak City. People who work in Oak City but who live elsewhere cannot fully understand the business and politics of the city. After all, only Oak City residents pay city taxes, and therefore only residents understand how that money could best be used to improve the city. We recommend, then, that the Committee for a Better Oak City vote to restrict its membership to city residents only. We predict that, without the interference of non-residents, the committee will be able to make Oak City a better place in which to live and work."
The argument that appeared in a local newspaper, the Oak City Gazette predicted that committee will able to make better place to live and work if there are no interference of non-residents. A committee suggests membership for only residents of Oak City Gazette. However, author fails to answer many questions which are necessary to strengthen their reasons.
Firstly, primary function of the committee to advice the city government to best use of budget. However, there must be some criteria to become a member of committee. But in recent meetings they failed to make any important decisions and the reasons behind this is foolish objections raised by non-residents member of committee. But report doesn't provide any details about how foolish objections are made by other committee members. There may be contradictions about decision which fair. There are chances that objections are based on their experience which resident of city may not understand. Report should provide details about how foolish objections are made by non-resident committee member.
Secondly, non-resident may not understand the business and politics of the city but if there are well experienced then they can use their experience to help this city also. Statement that only residents pay city taxes can only understand how their money could be used to improve city raise many questions. If they understand how to improve their cities then why they have not make any important decisions. If their decisions are efficient and effective then why any other member of committee will make any foolish objections which report fails to answer. So, there are many flaws in a report which weaken the argument.
Restriction of non-resident member in committee may raise some questions. How they make city a better place to work and live. There must be a other cities which are better than others. If there are other cities resident members in committee then there may be a chance that their suggestions improve condition of city. So, report should answer about other alternative which may help to improve city rather than restricting others.
In summary, this report raise many questions about committee which is only interested in restricting non-resident member rather than working together to improve better life of people. There are no strong evidence that suggest that only resident of city can make better decision.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 384 350
No. of Characters: 1969 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.427 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.128 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.667 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.521 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument that appeared in a local ne...
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Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the best'.
Suggestion: to the best
...committee to advice the city government to best use of budget. However, there must be s...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...sidents member of committee. But report doesnt provide any details about how foolish o...
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Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... use their experience to help this city also. Statement that only residents pay city...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'made'.
Suggestion: made
...ove their cities then why they have not make any important decisions. If their decis...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r place to work and live. There must be a other cities which are better than othe...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'city'?
Suggestion: city
...to work and live. There must be a other cities which are better than others. If there ...
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Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er cities which are better than others. If there are other cities resident members...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27676240209 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72574852512 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.399477806789 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1970672149 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8636363636 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4090909091 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04545454545 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292035320476 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114679835159 0.0743258471296 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10251910037 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197223115346 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705605706254 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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