The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument suggests that Clearview is the best choice to retirees to stay and enjoy the rest of their lives. The argument seems tempting and reasonable at first glance, however, there are some specific evidences needed to strengthen its suggestion. Otherwise, the argument remains specious.
To begin with, the argument asserts that Clearview’s beautiful natural scenery and consistent climate are the best for people after retirement. However, it fails to provide details about the exact content of its environment and climate. For example, what kind of beautiful scenery is it? Is it a majestic crayon or a powerful waterfall? These natural scenery are consider “beautiful” to some extends. Also, what is the climate there exactly? Is it located on a tropical continent or a near Arctic region? Without further evidences about its natural surroundings, the arguments is unwarranted
Secondly, the argument avers that the taxes are low and the prices of houses have fallen during the past a few years. But, the argument remains unconvincing since there are no evidences indicates that if the advantages mentioned in the argument is going to remain or it is about to change. What if a person buy a house there and the policy suddenly changes in the following years? Moreover, the mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Still the argument cannot guarantee if the major can bring what he or she says into practices. What if the mayor loses the election next time and none of the policies will be fulfilled? Therefore, without providing the evidences about the variability of prices and taxes as well as the feasibility of the mayor’s policies, the argument remains unjustified.
Regardless to the number of physicians that Clearview has, the argument seems to believe quantity is quality. Even though there are handful of physicians there, it doesn’t mean they will provide good health care. Therefore, evidences of their specialties as well as proficiency are needed. Otherwise the argument is not persuasive enough for people who may require extra medical attention.
To sum up, the argument has some flaws and specific evidences are needed to strengthen its suggestion, evidences such as: its natural environment and climate, the variability of prices and taxes as well as the feasibility of the mayor’s policies as well as the credibility of its medical professionals.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1978 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.085 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.73 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.913 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.949 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...ul waterfall? These natural scenery are consider 'beautiful' to some extends. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
... schools, streets, and public services. Still the argument cannot guarantee if the ma...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 133, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'handfuls', 'handsful'?
Suggestion: handfuls; handsful
...ntity is quality. Even though there are handful of physicians there, it doesn't me...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 296, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...ties as well as proficiency are needed. Otherwise the argument is not persuasive enough f...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, kind of, such as, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34278350515 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0175239681 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510309278351 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.0846181826 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2272727273 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13207563344 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.039863398788 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484844542871 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0708919260661 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528917883757 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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