The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate Another advantage is that housing costs in

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The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement. "Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average." Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The recommendation endorsed by the author is that Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire due to several advantages. However, there are some crucial pieces of evidence required to be examined to evaluate the validity of the conclusion.

First of all, the author claimed that the housing costs in Clearview have fallen in significantly during the past year. However, the key issue is that whether the housing price there is affordable for reader. Perhaps housing prices were too high for people to pay, so housing prices there have fallen due to market mechanism. In addition, it was referred that taxes are lower than neighboring towns. But we still don’t know how much it cost. Therefore, without further information, the author fails to make the conclusion convincing.

Even though the housing cost is low at Clearview, the author cannot unfairly assumes that the number of physicians and health care in the area are positive related. Indeed, in most case, the more physicians there are, the more people living there can get good treatment. However, such unilateral standpoint toward the issue of health care of the area is too constricted. Maybe the reason why there are many physicians here is that the popularity here is so large so that people live in here need more doctors to serve them. In this case, the average health care people can get may be even less that other area.

Finally, the author assumes that the mayor will keep his promise and expected him to improve public service. To be precise, there are still a lot of reason for mayor to change his mind, such as the revenue this year, or some exigent events that need lots of money, etc. All of these may cause the program of public to cease. Hence, the promise that the mayor had made didn’t means that there will really be a lot of public affair program there.

In conclusion, several logical fallacies render the conclusion vulnerable to refutation. The author should consider other factors and provides more evidence to strength his or her argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'seeks'.
Suggestion: seeks
...rview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire due to several advant...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[4]
Message: The verb 'didn't' requires base form of this verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
... promise that the mayor had made didn’t means that there will really be a lot of publ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90857142857 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47435829653 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534285714286 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.235800198 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.4210526316 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4210526316 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165177948146 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475554215564 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083122243057 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988232856875 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977391149498 0.0628817314937 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1656 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.705 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.374 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.776 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5