The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of a company that specializes in the delivery of heating oil.
"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season, that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we can safely predict that this region will experience an increased demand for heating oil during the next five years."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this recommendation, the developer suggests to his/her company that they should specialize in the delivery of heating oil. To support his conlusion, he points out that the consistency of the exteme coldness and the increasing tendence of population will welcome the increasing demand of heating oil during the next five years. Moreover, the developers use a series evidence to demonstrate that there is a urgent need of using oil to keep warm. In addition, a weather forecaste is cited to prove that there will definitely be an below-normal weather in the future. Although the recommendation of specializing in the delivery of heating oil may finally turn out to be lucrative, close scrunity reveals that the conclusion lacks critical support and therefore we need more evidence to help evaluate this argument.
First of all, we need evidenceto verify that whether nowsdays that people in northeresatern United States still utilizes oil for heating instead of others. While the author shows that residents here have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating ,no evidence serves to rule thepossibility that they still use it given that the gas enery as well as the other recycling energy is more environmentally friendly and cheaper. Thus, if no evidence shows that the residents here continues using oil for heating, then it is safe to claim that the company should specializing delivery of heating oil due to earning more profit, and the developer's argument is strengthened. However, if new evidence disclose an opposite situation, which is , the citizens are turning into using other clean energy, then the proposed in the argument is greatly weakened.
In addition, we need more evidence to ascertain whether the climate in the northeastern UNited States will experience an increasing coldness in the nest five years.First , it may well premise that it is true beacause the climate forecaste provided is pretty convincing. However, specific evidence should provided to re-examine whether the weather report is suitable and valid. If new evidence shows that the weather forecast was dominted by the local climated bureau with detailed information analyzing, then the efficiency of the research is strenthened. However, if new evidence reveals that the current climate forecast is no other than a weather report for only a few days or doesn not concerns about the local conditions, then the prediction that there will be coming a extremely cold weather is in great doubt and the developer's conclusion is thereby rendered unconvincing,
Finally, despite the presence of all the previous evidence, an accurate evaluation of the develper;s request requires additional details. Specific evidence is needed to show whether there is a increasing number of people and whether the result of increasing population will be applied to the ballooning need of heating oil. If the answer is positive, ten the reasoning of the argument is strenthened; however, if buiding homes is for another usages or the new residents give priority to other fuel for heating, we are reluctant to believe that there will experience an increased demand for heating oil and the developer's reconmmendation.
To sum up, the evidence cited by the developer does not provide enough conclusive information to make their request convincing. As a result, we need addtional evidence to better evaluate the recommendation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...oil due to earning more profit, and the developers argument is strengthened. However, if n...
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...reasing coldness in the nest five years.First , it may well premise that it is true b...
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...lusion is thereby rendered unconvincing, Finally, despite the presence of all the...
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...ence is needed to show whether there is a increasing number of people and whether...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, in addition, as a result, as well as, first of all, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 34.0 16.3942115768 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2873.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 540.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32037037037 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9855961774 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459259259259 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 921.6 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.6397794983 57.8364921388 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.0 119.503703932 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7647058824 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64705882353 5.70786347227 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218183268725 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078283173355 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700818540083 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122615832877 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874321157552 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 98.500998004 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.