The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:
“In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Mayor of the city of Hillview wrote a memo to the city council of Hillview pleading for authorization of a large campaign to attract the Autotech company to build its automobile manufacturing plant in their area. Mayor believes that the buliding and staffing of this plant will alleviate the problem of unemployment of thousands of residents of Hillview. For proper evaluation of this recommendation, a few questions must be answered properly.
Firstly, the Mayor suggests that The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this huge manufacturing plant. Using up this landfill might be a great environmental threat. More focus on the habitats of animals and birds who reside in this undeveloped landfill is required. If this landfill is utilized for the plant, then its environmental side effects on the fauna must be evaluated. If this plant poses a greater threat, then this campaign to attract the giant car manufacturer must be avoided.
Secondly, Mayor said that the Computech computer software programming company abandoned their national level facility in Hillview last year, burgeoning the unemployment in Hillview city. Instead of starting all over again and building a whole new plant at the undeveloped landfill, if we use this abandoned facility will minor changes according to the requirements of Autotech company, huge amount of resources will be saved. This approach is more thrifty. Building an entirely new facility is a prodigal use of resources. This factor must be taken into consideration in order to relieve the strain on city's budget.
Thirdly, Mayor suggests that company will be attracted to this place if they offer significant tax incentives. While this might work, but it would put excessive pressure on resident's pockets, as they would have to pay more taxes in order to compensate the overall tax income of the city. If the residents are already unemployed, then it will be difficult for them to thrive in such economical compromises.
Moreover, if the plant is to be built on this undeveloped landfill, it will take years to complete the plant and function properly. What are the remedies for unemployed people till the plant starts? If the plant takes 3 years to complete from today, the problem of unemployment still remains unsolved for next three years. What are the plans, however temporary, are to be implemented to reduce this unemployment in the city? More strategies should be discussed to tackle this problem.
Lastly, authorizing a large campaign just to attract a company will be a big financial risk. If the city spends all their resources on this campaign and the company refutes the tender, then it will exacerbate the situation. A backup plan must be ready before taking this big step.
In conclusion, the city council must think of all aspects of the consequences of this recommendation. By looking at the present condition and extrapolating, the council must decide whether to pass this recommendation or repudiate it.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2466 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.043 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.878 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.808 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.825 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.265 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2541.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1963190184 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95935104783 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490797546012 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.0314246247 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7307692308 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8076923077 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200002217206 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631155575649 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757776439965 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110868309769 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102095888636 0.0628817314937 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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