The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The vice president of the clothing company contends that they should resume their production of alpaca coat which had been discontinued five years ago due to the unavailability of high-quality wool fabric The availability of a new supplier was cited as a reason of recommencement of production. The arguer utilizes two assumptions to conclude that the coats will sell very well in the market. The first assumption is that there is a pent-up customer demands in the market on the alpaca coat because neither they nor their competitor have not made the coat in the recent past. The second assumption is that consumer would be willing to pay higher price as the overall price for clothing has increased in the past five years. Despite the assumptions made by the arguer, the argument is fallacious in several respects.
First, the author argued that the new fabric supplier is reliable one for high quality wool fabric.. However,there is not enough information related to the quality nor the reliability of the fabric supplied by the new supplier.As long as the quality of the new fabric is now known, it would be erroneous to say the fabric is of good quality. Additionally, even if the quality of the fabric supplied by the supplier is good, there is no proof whether it is good enough to meet the standard of the company leading to problems in the production of alpaca coats of the company. Furthermore, even if the fabric can meet the company’s standars, it is not know about the credentials of the company, whether it can meet the deadlines of supplies. Therefore, the argument that they should resume the production of alpaca coats because they have a new fabric supplier is fallacious due to lack of information.. Therefore, whether the new supplier would provide fair quality of wool fabric in a reliable way will strengthen or weaken the author’s assertion.
Second, the author insisted that there will be considerable demand on the alpaca overcoat because it has not been supplied neither by them nor their competitors for the recent past. It sounds plausible, however, it is not necessarily true. It is likely thatthe demand on the alpaca coat does not exist as it is replaced by a new product with better quality but lower price. Additionally, it is possible that the alpaca coat is not in vogu that is demand has diminished. Therefore, whether there exists a pent-up demand on the alpaca overcoat will corroborate or damage the author’s argument.
Finally, the author contends that consumer should be willing to pay significantly higher price for the alpaca overcoat since the market price for most of the clothing has risen continually during the last five years. However, it is uncertain whether this will be applicable to the alpaca overcoat. It is likely that the alpaca overcoat is already expensive that it is unlikely for people to choose to buy it at a higher price. Rather, people might choose to buy alternative to the alpaca coat which cost less. Additionally, if there is lack of consumer demand during the past five years, will there be demand for the alpaca coat at such higher price? Furthermore, if the price of fabric wool is very high, it is unlikely that the company would accrue profits by selling alpaca coat. In consequence, whether the assumption that the company would increase its profits by selling alpaca coats is unjustifiable.
To sum up, the author should provide information about the reliability of the new supplier, actual demand on the alpaca overcoat in the market, and the plausibility of increasing the price of alpaca overcoat to strengthen its argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It is likely thatthe demand on the alpaca coat does not exist as it is replaced by a new product with better quality but lower price.
Error: thatthe Suggestion: that the
Sentence: Additionally, it is possible that the alpaca coat is not in vogu that is demand has diminished.
Error: vogu Suggestion: vogue
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
No. of Words: 609 350 //the introduction is too long, and the first argument can be shorter. around 400-450 words are enough.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 609 350
No. of Characters: 2938 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.968 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.824 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.662 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 228 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.165 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...oats will sell very well in the market. The first assumption is that there is a pen...
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Line 1, column 577, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e not made the coat in the recent past. The second assumption is that consumer woul...
^^^
Line 1, column 817, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment is fallacious in several respects. First, the author argued that the new fa...
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Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...eliable one for high quality wool fabric.. However,there is not enough information...
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Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...e for high quality wool fabric.. However,there is not enough information related to th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...the fabric supplied by the new supplier.As long as the quality of the new fabric i...
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Line 3, column 655, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
... the company's standars, it is not know about the credentials of the company, w...
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Line 3, column 904, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...is fallacious due to lack of information.. Therefore, whether the new supplier wou...
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Line 3, column 985, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a reliable way" with adverb for "reliable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...uld provide fair quality of wool fabric in a reliable way will strengthen or weaken the author&ap...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3025.0 2260.96107784 134% => OK
No of words: 607.0 441.139720559 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98352553542 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96360453597 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83503278224 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.3607907743 0.468620217663 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 950.4 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4251063804 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.041666667 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2916666667 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.79166666667 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145000092899 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512341152663 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645513290849 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843836422498 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645161600263 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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