The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. Due to this demand and the overall increase in clothing prices, we can predict that Sartorian's alpaca overcoats will be more profitable than ever before."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The given argument has lots of loose ends woven together to claim the fact about the profit that could be earned through Sartorians alpaca overcoats.there are many questions that could be raised and answered to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable.In order to check the prediction, a brief study on the given argument is made in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the author talks about an issue which took place almost 5 years ago and whose solution for revival is also presented. but the underlying cause is not mentioned clearly. it is only stated that there was a difficulty of obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric as a result of which the production of alpaca overcoat discontinued. Why not the overcoat that was produced from the regular supplier discontinued? What could be the exact reason behind it? if the solution was known, then a possible remedy could have been suggested since the overcoat was popular during that period after the production from the regular supplies.
Secondly, it has been stated that the production could be resumed due to the identification of a new fabric supplier. but, is there a 100% guarantee that the quality would match with the once popular alpaca overcoat? The indication of the outcry from customers and that none of their competitors offer a comparable product cannot result in the consumer demand and profitability. The reason behind them is that, whatever was applicable 5 years back need not be applicable in the current scenario. moreover, with the passage of years, the craze for the overcoat could have subsided. A survey should be taken before arriving at proper conclusions. if the same proportion of people who had purchased the overcoat are willing to buy the product even after 5 years, then with much hope more number of the products could be manufactured and released and better profits could be estimated . however, if the customers are not satisfied with the quality of the new product, then it will only lead to the downfall of the men's clothing manufacturing industry.
In the last line the author addresses the increase in clothing price as a benefactor. however, if the same set of customers who purchased the coat are to buy again, they will surely not be happy about the increase in price even though the product is getting released after the lapse of 5 years.
Thus, we can end that whatever reasons the author addresses as a profitable ones really undermines the validity of the argument.A time span of 5 years could have resulted in enormous changes like the people, their behavioural pattern, cost of living, way of living and many other factors. An outdated product, although popular few years back, cannot fully assure us of its revival in the same magnificent way. moreover, profitability depends on a person's outlook to a particular commodity. since it had lost its reputation years back, it is difficult to expect the same level of demand from the human beings who always have a tendency to change and try for new innovations.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 520 350
No. of Characters: 2508 1500
No. of Different Words: 248 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.775 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.823 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.631 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 47.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.391 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.678 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: In
...ent on which it is based are reasonable.In order to check the prediction, a brief ...
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...nt is made in the following paragraphs. First of all, the author talks about an ...
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Suggestion: But
...solution for revival is also presented. but the underlying cause is not mentioned c...
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...erlying cause is not mentioned clearly. it is only stated that there was a difficu...
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Suggestion: If
...at could be the exact reason behind it? if the solution was known, then a possible...
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...e production from the regular supplies. Secondly, it has been stated that the pr...
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Suggestion: But
...dentification of a new fabric supplier. but, is there a 100% guarantee that the qua...
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Suggestion: If
... before arriving at proper conclusions. if the same proportion of people who had p...
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Suggestion: .
...ed and better profits could be estimated . however, if the customers are not satis...
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Suggestion: However
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...ease in clothing price as a benefactor. however, if the same set of customers who purch...
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...ng released after the lapse of 5 years. Thus, we can end that whatever reasons t...
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Suggestion: Moreover
...ts revival in the same magnificent way. moreover, profitability depends on a persons out...
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Line 9, column 448, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
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...y. moreover, profitability depends on a persons outlook to a particular commodity. sinc...
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Suggestion: Since
...sons outlook to a particular commodity. since it had lost its reputation years back, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2569.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 518.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95945945946 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72936989401 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505791505792 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.2109703563 57.8364921388 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.333333333 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12968981885 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373954149188 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452727529677 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0621558791043 0.128457276422 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445063199293 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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