The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following argument is flawed for numerous unwarranted assumptions for supporting its main conclusion that selling domestic cheeses will more profitable than imported cheeses. However, before establishing the conclusion there are some question would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result.
Firstly, does the last year situation still remain same in present year? It is possible that last year profitable cheeses will not give the same profit in this year. Perhaps, the test of people will change by eating same kind of domestic cheeses. May be there have been launching new flavored imported cheeses which seems more preferable to them. Or they are not buying the same kind of domestic cheeses which they tasted past few months. If any of them will cause, then the argument will not sustain its main conclusion. If the following argument could provide any proof that the previous year situation is still exist or work in this year then the argument’s main conclusion will become more logical.
Secondly, all the five best selling cheeses were domestic that does not mean that all kind the domestic cheeses are same popular. May be there are twenty kind of domestic cheeses and five of them were very popular but rest of them are not as much popular as imported others. May be after the top five domestic cheese there are more than ten imported cheeses are popular. Since there are no information about the popularity after the top five cheeses, so it is not sure that increasing domestic cheese over imported ones will be more profitable.
Finally, the survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers does not indicate that it will works in all country. May be its not the case. Perhaps, in your country the popularity of domestic cheeses is lower than the imported cheeses. Or top five domestic cheeses will not profitable as following. May be in your area there are many sophisticated people prefer imported cheeses over domestic one. Since the author failed to provide enough information about this fact then the following recommendation is flawed.
In conclusion, if the author can provide more information to counter the indicated question with a proper scientific method, then may be the recommendation about domestic cheeses is more profitable than imported cheeses will work on.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 1995 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.013 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.565 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.68 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...at the previous year situation is still exist or work in this year then the argument&...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...as much popular as imported others. May be after the top five domestic cheese ther...
^^
Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'work'
Suggestion: work
...scribers does not indicate that it will works in all country. May be its not the case...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...at it will works in all country. May be its not the case. Perhaps, in your country ...
^^^
Line 7, column 373, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...s will not profitable as following. May be in your area there are many sophisticat...
^^
Line 7, column 468, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...fer imported cheeses over domestic one. Since the author failed to provide enough inf...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14572864322 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65616751696 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427135678392 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.4950483056 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203879628661 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783441156899 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452576579274 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125436239071 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343855713484 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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