The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the memo, the vice president suggests that the contributing factor to on job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation and proposes that workload on the workers be reduced thereby resulting in increased productivity. Experts have come to this conclusion based off the fact that workers at panoply industries plant have lower on job accidents due to the fact that their work schedules are not as rigid as that in Quilot manufacturing. However this assumption can be analyzed by three reasons.
The author assumes that the contributing factor of on the job accidents which is lack of sleep and fatigue applies to Quilot manufacturing. Perhaps the workers at Quilot manage are not constantly working whenever they are at work, they might be sleeping during working hours or they might be doing other recreational activities. It is possible that the reason there is on the job accident is because of lack of experience on the path of the worker, perhaps the worker lied to get the job. If any of this assumption have merit then the conclusion drawn holds no water.
The author assumes the circumstances that persisted in the past years still exist today. There is a possibility that in recent times Quilot has seen a distinctive reduction in on the job accident by the better training of workers or better still by recruiting experienced hands for the job. Furthermore, it is possible that the equipment’s used in the past years were not in perfect working conditions which saw an increase in the number of accidents and now the managements have seen to it that there are better working tools to carry out the job. If the above is true, then the argument is not significant.
There is an assumption that causation of accidents in Quiot manufacturing and Panoply industries plant is comparable. Perhaps, the number of workers in Quiot been more compared to the number of staffs in panoply. The glut amount of workers in an enclosed space might lead to haphazardness thereby causing accidents. Maybe, the produce of the companies varies with Quiot manufacturing industry dealing with the production of engineering products and panoply dealing with the production of other less harmful products. If the above is true, then the argument is significantly flawed.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1856 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.936 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.821 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.034 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.319 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 440, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... rigid as that in Quilot manufacturing. However this assumption can be analyzed by thre...
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Line 2, column 490, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...perhaps the worker lied to get the job. If any of this assumption have merit then ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02127659574 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89257549309 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460106382979 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3951424798 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1875 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224409709081 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669828430674 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065647676933 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130030606627 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254403770769 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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