The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing."During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than
The author of this argument claims that for decreasing the amounts of accidents during work time, the factories should decrease one hour in any shifts. To support this recommendation the author cites the following facts that on-the-job accidents are less in Panoply Industries where the work shifts are one hour short. He also cites other evidence that this plan allows workers to get more time for sleep, which experts believe that is the main cause of these accidents. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveals that none of them lend credible support to the recommendation.
The argument fails to provide any justification that two factory similar terms of terms of respective population. For one, it may Panoply Industries is better equipped by modern technology, which decrease the amount of human mistakes. This important difference could explain the success of this factory. More significantly, Panoply Industries may pay attention for training their employees and increasing their performance. In this way, the argument would have been stronger had it provided information regarding the similarity in these factories.
Moreover, the argument overlooks the strong possibility that in-the-job accidents are not the only factor affecting how much employees get sleep. Other such factors might include experience for working with equipment and the how much factory spend time for training workers and warn about possible dangerous of careless. Thus regardless of decreasing the amount of work time the amount of accident during work nevertheless will be stable or even increase.
In sum, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it the author must either provide more evidence about causes of in-the-job accident, or to better assess the accuracy of decreasing one hour in each sifts, it would be useful to know in what areas our factory is similar with Panoply Industries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
... is the main cause of these accidents. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveal...
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Line 4, column 74, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'terms of'.
Suggestion: terms of
... justification that two factory similar terms of terms of respective population. For one, it may ...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...s are not the only factor affecting how much employees get sleep. Other such factors...
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Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...perience for working with equipment and the how much factory spend time for training wo...
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Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...n about possible dangerous of careless. Thus regardless of decreasing the amount of ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272727272727 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.148484848485 0.15541462614 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0969696969697 0.0836205057962 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0333333333333 0.0520304965353 64% => OK
Pronouns: 0.030303030303 0.0272364105082 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130303030303 0.125424944231 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0363636363636 0.0416121511921 87% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80417357815 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0212121212121 0.026700313972 79% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.106060606061 0.113004496875 94% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0272727272727 0.0255425247493 107% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0212121212121 0.0127820249294 166% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1947.0 2731.13054187 71% => OK
No of words: 304.0 446.07635468 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.40460526316 6.12365571057 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.57801047555 91% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.414473684211 0.378187486979 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.322368421053 0.287650121315 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.236842105263 0.208842608468 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.167763157895 0.135150697306 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80417357815 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 207.018472906 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555921052632 0.469332199767 118% => OK
Word variations: 58.4801326604 52.1807786196 112% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 21.7142857143 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6730183828 57.7814097925 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.071428571 141.986410481 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.724660767414 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 53.9511278195 51.9672348444 104% => OK
Elegance: 2.07142857143 1.8405768891 113% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424209677851 0.441005458295 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106917071993 0.135418324435 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0951365592572 0.0829849096947 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.564439447925 0.58762219726 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134015776049 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192205578989 0.193483328276 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118549492801 0.0970749176394 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.35044513382 0.42659136922 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0540422498006 0.0774707102158 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304835027265 0.312017818177 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576860530816 0.0698173142475 83% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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