The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of the
Juniper Café, a small, local coffee shop in the downtown area of a
small American city:
“We must reduce overhead here at the café. Instead of opening
at 6 a.m. weekdays, we will now open at 8 a.m. On weekends,
we will only be open from 9 a.m. until 4 p.m. The decrease in
hours of operations will help save money because we won’t be
paying for utilities, employee wages, or other operating costs
during the hours we are closed. This is the best strategy for us
to save money and remain in business without having to
eliminate jobs.”
The statement above cites the memorandum from the owner of the Jupiter Café which indicates that in order to save his business and not eliminating jobs he want to undertake some strategy which made some unwarranted assumptions. Unless the assumptions are answered the implementation of the strategy might actually do more harm to the business instead of serving the ultimate motive.
At first the argument considers that they must reduce overheads in order to sustain the business and also they do not want to eliminate jobs, but on the other hand they are reducing working hours and clearly states that reducing working hours will reduce employee wages. Reducing employee wages in some way means to deduct salary of the employee or they will make less amount of wage a week than before, but it is not supported by any information that the employees are okay with the deduction of wages, which can in the end, result in eliminating jobs if not addressed earlier.
There is no mention of how he owner look at the economic theory of business as revenue, cost and profit. That is, the owner is only considering reducing cost to increase profit and did not take into account that reducing the business hour will actually case less amount of sales and ultimately lead to less amount of revenue which will also reduce the profit and in cases might not be ale to cover any of the overhead cost and impede the growth of the business. Beside the working hour finalized is not backed by any survey information on which the city operates. It might hold true that the small city might starts its day a bit late and maximum of the sales occur after 8 am in that case opening the store 8 am is a strategical move. But there is not such evidence to back the time section made by the owner.
The two main important thing of sustain one business is its customer service and availability. Cutting down on the working hour directly impacts the availability of the product to its customers which in the long run will impact the sustainability of the company itself. The argument directly asserts that cutting down on working hour will help save money in terms of utility, operating costs etc. it might be a good idea to check on the utility and other operating costs one by one and take a details report on this if not taken earlier to check if there are any room for changes and save any extra bucks in order to satisfy the objective of reducing overheads.
In conclusion it can be said that the argument make a lot of unstated assumptions which if goes unwarranted can render to many new problems to the business. Proper survey and information on each of the mentioned agendas are required in order tot make the informed choices to make to save the business.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2230 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.588 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.461 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.057 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...is business and not eliminating jobs he want to undertake some strategy which made s...
^^^^
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hich made some unwarranted assumptions. Unless the assumptions are answered the implem...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 89, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...ake a lot of unstated assumptions which if goes unwarranted can render to many new...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, so, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50300501881 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465020576132 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.9592310576 57.8364921388 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.2 119.503703932 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131565403076 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391551237334 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363839295001 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0636730561514 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478570810489 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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