The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.
"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In the given part of an article in a Dillton newspaper talks about Dillton’s unemployment rate. As mentioned in the article to bring new jobs to Dillton the city council voted to reduce 15 percent in corporate tax rate and offering generous relocation grants to companies move to Dillton. After these efforts two new factories established and brought employment to more than 1000 people but the unemployment rate is still unchanged. In this situation the city council put explanation that the new factories are giving employment to other cities people than Dillton residents. The explanation seems unconvincing and questionable when we read the argument.
Firstly, the city has been fought with difficulties of unemployment which is not discussed with proper statistical data. It may be possible the factories provided sufficient employment according to their capacities but in proportion to unemployment rate this number of jobs were very small. On the other hand, another plausible condition is Now a day’s maximum work done with machines and factory has automated machinery so, there is possibility they showed number of employed people more than 1000 people on papers but actually it is less. In both cases the unemployment rate in Dillton city remains unchanged.
Secondly, to establish the factories is not sufficient to decrease unemployment rate because the salary should meet works basic requirements. Giving jobs is not reduce the unemployment rate the city should work on per capital income of the city, which means worker get enough money to complete basic needs. The factory provide jobs to Dillton residents and after days there were fired from factory and it might be a reason behind unvarying rate of unemployment.
Thirdly, the city gave allure proposals to cooperates for opening manufacturing their city but only two factories come to Dillton. This is also important point of discussion. It brings doubt about availability of basic resources for any factory such as water, transportation, land, electricity and many more. There is easily available employment for any industry, in spite of it only two factories established raised questions on basic resources. If there is lack of resources, then the city council should take strong step to fulfill them Despite of reducing corporate rate and offering relocation grants.
Finally, on the basis of above points it is clear that the council assumed flawed explanation. There are different reasons behind high unemployment rate which could be solved if council clearly analyses the problem. Without concrete reason one cannot reached to concrete solution.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 2172 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.259 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.815 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.169 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: reduced
... basic requirements. Giving jobs is not reduce the unemployment rate the city should w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, such as, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 413.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3995157385 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91412380647 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535108958838 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1320220232 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.65 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263425764221 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870366644248 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999353114942 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146413943858 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114959738652 0.0628817314937 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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