The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.
"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."
Based on the fact that there are existing decline in tax of 15% and the new factories supply 1,000 jobs, which copes with the problem of unemployment of 1,000 residents, the unemployment rate remains. The newspaper drew the conclusion that the new-established factories are staffed with out- of-town workers, however, this conclusion does not hold water bacause of the following reasons.
Firstly, as the newspaper mentioned, the tax rate was solely been reduced by 15%, there mignt exist a huge tax data base that 15% cannnot release the burden on the the residents, therefore maynot make any through changes. If the past tax rate in the city is high, those kind of slight measure will not make a huge difference. To consider this way from a more big-pictured and far-fetched angle, the tax rate should be decreased sharply, or the measure that focused on tax maybe even a wrong way that Dillton's economy could be even worse.
Secondly, the newspaper argue that 1,000 people is a huge difference for the unemployment conditions, holding the assumption that there are not much people in the Dillton. To be more specific, they assume that the pupulation data base of the town is small, or even less than 1,000, that the cooperation which creates 1,000 jobs can increase the overall living standards or even solve the problem of the unemployment. However, the population of Dillton could be large that 1,000 jobs will not make much differences, such as for 100,000,000, 1,000 people can get a job is a tiny promotion.
Even if the tax rate is enough and efficient to rise the living standard of the residents, and the 1,000 do assist a large proportion of unemployed people to get a job, it does not mean that the unchaged unemployment rate can solely caused by the exotic workers who grab the natives' opportunities. There are many factors that can lead to the unemployment, which can be generally be divided into two categories, workers with strong willingness to work are not able to find a satisfied job and the workers who does not want to obtain a job. As for the first category, the asytrimecity of the information should be take into consideration as soon as possible, a complete platform for job finding and information offering is necesssary. And for the second condition, the mental education is of great importance, grow the willingness to work into their mind should be the first step rather than directly provide the chances to work.
To sum up, the article in a Dillton, there is no clear evidence indicates that the factories are staffeed with the outside worders, and the remain of the unemployment can be caused by complicated reasons.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 451 350
No. of Characters: 2150 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.608 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.767 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.706 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.655 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...e new-established factories are staffed with out- of-town workers, however, this conclus...
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Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... that 15% cannnot release the burden on the the residents, therefore maynot make any th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... that 15% cannnot release the burden on the the residents, therefore maynot make any th...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
... the past tax rate in the city is high, those kind of slight measure will not make a huge ...
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Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...lding the assumption that there are not much people in the Dillton. To be more speci...
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Line 5, column 498, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... be large that 1,000 jobs will not make much differences, such as for 100,000,000, 1...
^^^^
Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...e unchaged unemployment rate can solely caused by the exotic workers who grab the nati...
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Line 7, column 613, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'taken'?
Suggestion: taken
...ytrimecity of the information should be take into consideration as soon as possible,...
^^^^
Line 9, column 137, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... staffeed with the outside worders, and the remain of the unemployment can be caused by co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, even so, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90465631929 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8061073702 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481152993348 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.7344055047 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.153846154 119.503703932 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6923076923 23.324526521 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109487365326 0.218282227539 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440736473524 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280808440075 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0647358669222 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252716651704 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.3799401198 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.3550499002 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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