The following appeared in a recommendation from the planning department of the city of Transopolis.
"Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument by the author to decrease residential area on the opposite side of the city by considering a situation which occurred 10 years ago is completely flawed. Stated this way, the author's argument lacks proper evidences and also reveals instances of improper reasoning.The argument made by the author generalizes that what was favorable 10 years ago is also favorable today. The argument also uses vague and ambiguous language which makes exactly unclear to what extent the change reflected 10 years ago. Hence careful scrutiny of author's evidences provides only little credible support towards author's argument. Hence we can say that the argument is incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, the author assumes that the condition of city has not at all changed from what it was 10 years ago. It might be possible that in the past 10 years the the city went into a metamorphosis and is now well developed,well-planned and the most of its inhabitants are well settled with their current jobs and living standards. Therefore, if such condition persists, then declining residential area on the opposite side of city would lessen the living standards of the city than which the people are accustomed to and hence no one would prefer to live in such an area. Furthermore, there is no sureness that if the residential areas would be less, then factories would be built in that area. Hence, if there will less attraction towards that area also the tax revenues of that area won't increase.
Furthermore, the author also mentions ambiguous and vague words in his argument such as increased property taxes. We know that the property taxes increased but exactly how much? Did it increase only 0.02% or by 5%? The author fails to provide such statistical data. Moreover, The arguer also does not mention the taxes of different regions. So we don't exactly know that the increase in taxes was due to the increases by other regions or it was the impact of change of the region in which residential areas were declined.
Also, the arguer also does not consider what will the condition of city if more industries would be built along the ample of industries preexisting within the city. It would surely deteriorate the quality of living of the citizens. Furthermore, there is also the possibility that the land is fertile which can be used for cultivation, building schools etc.
The arguer also mentions the decrease in crime rates which is the result of urban renewal is completely baseless. It may be possible that the denizens became more aware of their surroundings or more amount was spent on security rather than living. Or they might have become more vigilant.
In sum, the author's argument remains unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster the argument further better and more concrete evidences are needed which can perhaps be found by detailed analysis or surveys of the project implemented 10 years ago along with the current condition of the city. Finally, to assess the argument further information is needed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 507 350
No. of Characters: 2471 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.745 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.615 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.3 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.708 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.295 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...completely flawed. Stated this way, the authors argument lacks proper evidences and als...
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Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...reveals instances of improper reasoning.The argument made by the author generalizes...
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Line 1, column 515, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ent the change reflected 10 years ago. Hence careful scrutiny of authors evidences p...
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Line 1, column 623, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...dible support towards authors argument. Hence we can say that the argument is incompl...
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Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...t be possible that in the past 10 years the the city went into a metamorphosis and is ...
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Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...t be possible that in the past 10 years the the city went into a metamorphosis and is ...
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Line 2, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s the the city went into a metamorphosis and is now well developed,well-planned a...
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Line 2, column 226, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , well-planned
...metamorphosis and is now well developed,well-planned and the most of its inhabitants are wel...
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Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...n the taxes of different regions. So we dont exactly know that the increase in taxes...
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Line 6, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...have become more vigilant. In sum, the authors argument remains unpersuasive as it sta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2516.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 503.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00198807157 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76114728445 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467196819085 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3491364722 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.64 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.12 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132711723058 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357118268924 0.0743258471296 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419253940953 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654294765321 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497153353091 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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