The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches.
Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing
companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use
of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported
by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can
also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady
decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how
the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia, it is stated that a rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. The conclusion is based on the childish assumption by the author: Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Food-processing companies have also been adding
salicylates to foods as preservatives for the past several decades. However, before this recommendation is properly evaluated three-question must be answered.
Are the aspirin and salicylates have cent percent same properties? Being in the same family doesn't mean that their functioning is completely similar. For example, Being from the same family element, nitrogen is very useful for plant growth whereas nitrogen mixes with water in the presence of hydrogen make acid which is very harmful to the plant. So same family doesn't mean they work
a similar way. The above quote of the author needs to provide more scientific shreds of evidence.
Similarly,, is salicylates is the only factor responsible for reducing headaches? The author trying to telling an effect cause only by one
effect. There might be several reasons for reducing headache victims. For example, pollution is another factor of headache.
In Media, the pollution level might be controlled. The number of afforestation might have increased. Because of all the fresh air available in surrounding may decline the number of headache people. If this reason is true then the above argument doesn't hold water.
Further, are all people with headaches reporting sincerely? Headache is a common disease in our daily lifestyle. As information flow(about health) through social media has been increased day by day, people are taking headaches not seriously. Due to this might not reporting headaches. This might also seem to reduce the number of headache patients. These statements if true make above
conclusion of the author, completely senseless.
In conclusion, the above argument as stand now is completely fallacious because it relies on several unwarranted assumptions
If the author is capable of answering three-question above and provide more evidence with scientific research study, then it will be
possible to accept salicylates as the main factor of reduction of headache reported in Media.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 2015 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.18 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.889 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.208 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.176 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.458 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.268 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.47 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study.Th...
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Suggestion: The
... participants in our twenty-year study.The conclusion is based on childish assumpt...
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...mption by author:Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, ...
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...rin, a medicine used to treat headaches.Food-processing companies have also been adding salicy...
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Suggestion: However
...servatives for the past several decades.However before this recommendation is properly ...
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Suggestion: However,
...servatives for the past several decades.However before this recommendation is properly ...
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...his recommendation is properly evaluated three question must be answered. I...
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...ated three question must be answered. Is the aspirin and salicylates have cent...
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...t same properties? Being in same family doesnt meant that their functioning are comp...
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...mily doesnt meant that their functioning are completely similar.For example, Bein...
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...ir functioning are completely similar.For example, Being form same family element...
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... example, Being form same family element,nitrogen is very useful for plant growth where a...
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Line 9, column 109, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
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...itrogen is very useful for plant growth where as nitrogen mixes with water in the pres...
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...seful for plant growth where as nitrogen mixes with water in the present of hydro...
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...ry harmful to the plant. So same family doesnt mean they work similar way.The above q...
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...mily doesnt mean they work similar way.The above quote of auther needs to provide ...
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...s to provide more scientific evidences. Similary,is salicylates is only factor r...
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...re scientific evidences. Similary,is salicylates is only factor responsible ...
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...ling a effect cause only by one effect.There might be numbers of reason for reducing...
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... of afforestation might have increases. Because of all fresh air available in surroun...
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...have increases. Because of all fresh air available in surrounding may decline the...
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...y decline the number of headache people.If this reason is true then above argument...
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...y decline the number of headache people.If this reason is true then above argument...
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...this reason is true then above argument doesnt hold water. Further,are all people w...
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...e argument doesnt hold water. Further,are all people with headache reporting sinc...
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... common disease in our daily life style.As information flowabout health through ...
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...e in our daily life style.As information flowabout health through social media ha...
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...aking headache not seriously.Due to this might not reporting headache. This might...
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...ents. This statements if true make above conclusion of author, completely sensele...
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...mpletely senseless. In conlusion, the above argument as stand now is completel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, then, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 365.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63835616438 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22882262638 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539726027397 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 155.770115519 57.8364921388 269% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.2 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 5.15768463074 407% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 33.0 5.25449101796 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3198074377 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945579936103 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982624771259 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906000413683 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815846416483 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.3550499002 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.5979740519 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 12.3882235529 246% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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