The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions Since they were declared a wildl | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."

The letter written to the editor for the West Lansburg News states that West Lansburg council should not allow roads to be built along the edge of the wetlands to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment. The author comes this conclusion on the basis of the decline in sea otters in a similar sanctury, Eastern Carpenteria after the repeal of their sanctury status in 1978. The argument seems valid at first, however, as we delve deeper into it we find many flaws. To evaluate the argument, further information is required. The author should answer these three questions.

Are Eastern Carpentaria and West Lansburg comaparable? It is possible that there was some other factor that caused the decline in the the population of sea otters. Pollution might have increased in the area, affecting the health of the sea otters, leading to their deaths ad causing a decline in their population. It is also possible that a road was never created around the edges of Eastern Carpentaria. They lost their sanctury status because of their negligence in taking care of the otters. They might not have been providing enough food or taking plently care of the sea otters, resulting in a decline in their population and revoking the sanctury status. If either of the above scenarios is true, the conclusion of the argument is weakened.

Is a situtation from 1978 still a valid basis to decide whether the road should be constructed or not? It is possible that two or three years ago, another similar sanctury had a road built around it's edges , which had no impact of the population of the animals. Perhaps, the conditions of the road and the materials used were quite different in 1978. Maybe, today the materials and silencing technology used have advanced significantly. They might not affect the tufted groundhogs at all. If the above scenarios stand true, the argument does not hold water.

Will the building of a road on the edges of the sanctury have any effect on the tufted groundhogs? It is possible that a road constructed around the edges does not have any affect on the groudhogs. The area of sanctury might be huge and no tufted groundhogs might meander around the edges, leaving them unimpacted by the construction of the road. It is also possible that consturction if the road leads more people to visit the sanctury and provide donations. This will help the sanctury to provide better care to the groundhogs and may even result in an increase in their number, having a positive effect on them. If the above cases are true, the argument is significantly weakened.

The argument as it stands, is flawed considerable because of its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the three questions and provide more information ,the argumnt can be strengthened and evaluated.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
...he edge of the wetlands to preserve the regions biodiversity and ensure a healthy envir...
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Line 1, column 401, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...epeal of their sanctury status in 1978. The argument seems valid at first, however,...
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...other factor that caused the decline in the the population of sea otters. Pollution mig...
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...other factor that caused the decline in the the population of sea otters. Pollution mig...
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Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nctury had a road built around its edges , which had no impact of the population o...
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Line 7, column 174, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...cted around the edges does not have any affect on the groudhogs. The area of sanctury mig...
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Line 9, column 183, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e questions and provide more information ,the argumnt can be strengthened and eval...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2356.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 477.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9392033543 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70392937168 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454926624738 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1340280834 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6153846154 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3461538462 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.76923076923 5.70786347227 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129915617255 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370437939082 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692742504633 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0673791865118 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468540742436 0.0628817314937 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments