The following is an excerpt from a speech given to the School Board about a change to the curriculum:
"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
The speech argues, that mandatory classes in computer programming for high school students will help them secure high paying programming jobs, and be useful to them in general due to industries becoming more technological. however, the speech does not support it's argument with much data, and several questions need answers before it can be evaluated.
Firstly, it is important to know if such an amount of courses can be added to the school's curriculum and not put too much load on the students. Four years of courses is a lot, and in most schools students already study a lot as it is, so this might result in the students experiencing too much stress, which leads to more anxiety and potential mental health problems. information on their current schedule would help decide whether it's reasonable to put more strain on the students.
One argument the speech makes is that the courses would secure high paying programming jobs for the students. The fact that these jobs are high paying does not necessarily mean that they are in high demand, software engineering is a tricky business, it requires studying and alot of work that can become rather stressful. so it would be wise to analyse the demand for programmers before saying that students can or cant find these jobs.
Finally, the speech argues, that programming skills will benefit students even if they dont pursue programming careers, due to industries becoming more technological. however, some students might look for work that might be completely unrelated to industry, like art for example, a mandatory course of programming would be completely useless to them. A breakdown of the planed career paths of the students would allow to determine how useful the course would be to the students.
To conclude, to analyse the effectiveness of the proposed course, it would be prudent to first understand how much additional load it would put on the students. And more information on the potential careers of the students will help say how useful the course would be.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1655 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.911 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.627 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.5 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.499 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.787 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...industries becoming more technological. however, the speech does not support its argume...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 279, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...eech does not support its argument with much data, and several questions need answer...
^^^^
Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...n amount of courses can be added to the schools curriculum and not put too much load on...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 369, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Information
...y and potential mental health problems. information on their current schedule would help de...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 323, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... work that can become rather stressful. so it would be wise to analyse the demand ...
^^
Line 13, column 416, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...mers before saying that students can or cant find these jobs. Finally, the s...
^^^^
Line 19, column 88, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ills will benefit students even if they dont pursue programming careers, due to indu...
^^^^
Line 19, column 168, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...industries becoming more technological. however, some students might look for work that...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 419, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'determining'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: determining
...areer paths of the students would allow to determine how useful the course would be to the s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, for example, in general, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 337.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10089020772 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70837153135 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480712166172 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7069233536 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.230769231 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9230769231 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2073370018 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834055832574 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594305913727 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125012386907 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459306686614 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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