The following is an excerpt from a speech given to the School Board about a change to the curriculum:
"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The excerpt is proving to mandate the learning of computer programming skill for all high school students. Their prime reason for making this obligatory step is the upsurge of software engineering and computational skills in recent times. However the assumptions that have been incorporated here are as follows -
1. That the students taking the classes will be able to join the jobs paying high salaries and will lead fulfilling lives.
2. Have ignored the speculations of individual's passion and take a generalization for the future prospect.
3.That learning coding will eventually help them in any sphere of life irrespective of their professions.
4. It is a mandatory for one to learn coding in bachelor in a view to earn greater in real life.
All the aforementioned assumptions are implicitly provided in the prompt, however, these assumptions must be given certain fate to come to any conclusion.
To begin with - It is readymadely believed that students who will take computer classes in their four-year bachelor classes will earn in gloat. If that is the case then why students of other faculties are not doing the same? If earning is that much easy then the graduate students of other genres would have lived lavish lives as they were also compelled to learn their courses in the schools. But we can see that is not the case. Rather proper guidance, passion for their respective subjects and working diligently will do the work.
Coming then, even if we assume that there will be available jobs in future in the field of software engineering or data science, does it suffice enough to convince an authority to make it an obligation for the students. As the vacancies are increasing so are the competitions. A student has to be competent enough to compete with others and grab the job. And for that one has to learn the coding by heart under proper guidance and with best possible resources. But in the prompt there is no evidence that the school is going to provide the students with enough good resources and also there is no proper guidelines of teaching. That is why only mandating a subject to learn for the students without ensuring good enough teachings stuffs and materials, will not only be waste of time effort for the teachers and also a burden for the students.
One of the most important points that the school is missing is that each and every individual may not be interested in learning coding. One may not like to learn coding than to painting. For him learning coding will nothing but an upheaveal task, and consequently we can not expect a much potent result from as we can do from a passionate well learned student of programming. In that case, whatever opportunities of coding are in front him, he won't feel the appetite for any of those.
Finally it is believed by the authority of the school that a four year of coding syllabus is a necessary one for an individual to shine. But they are missing the fact that learning early does not mean learning enough for learning properly. What if a student who learnt the coding later than an earlier one but solved problems more efficiently?
So looking overall points it won't be a nice idea to come any conclusions before answered the questions and act with proper bounds.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 563 350
No. of Characters: 2642 1500
No. of Different Words: 269 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.871 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.693 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.637 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.767 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.531 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.567 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.226 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...d computational skills in recent times. However the assumptions that have been incorpor...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 2, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...eralization for the future prospect. 3.That learning coding will eventually help th...
^^^^
Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
...r the future prospect. 3.That learning coding will eventually help them in any sphere...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 38, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
... 4. It is a mandatory for one to learn coding in bachelor in a view to earn greater i...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 432, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...s. But we can see that is not the case. Rather proper guidance, passion for their resp...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 535, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd working diligently will do the work. Coming then, even if we assume that ther...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 432, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the best'.
Suggestion: with the best
...ding by heart under proper guidance and with best possible resources. But in the prompt t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 14, column 129, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
...idual may not be interested in learning coding. One may not like to learn coding than ...
^^^^^^
Line 14, column 163, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
...rning coding. One may not like to learn coding than to painting. For him learning codi...
^^^^^^
Line 14, column 205, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
...ding than to painting. For him learning coding will nothing but an upheaveal task, and...
^^^^^^
Line 16, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... feel the appetite for any of those. Finally it is believed by the authority of the ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, as to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2710.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 560.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83928571429 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68978885718 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 204.123752495 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476785714286 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 831.6 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7039952122 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.37037037 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7407407407 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48148148148 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 5.15768463074 213% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290610261609 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075382787277 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581769800006 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106083725062 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584859390811 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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