The following is an excerpt from a speech given to the School Board about a change to the curriculum:
"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
What the future holds, no one knows. But technology is here to stay for sure. With advances in machine learning and artificial intelligence and other key fields in science, it is needless to say that technology will become a necessary skill for every individual in the near future. Hence, the argument stated to implement mandatory computer programming lectures for students is a smart decision.
However, as the argument further states to provide the reason for the decision taken, there are some flaws observed in the assumptions made. The argument states that 'all' the students, on attending the computer classes, will develop the necessary programming skills required to land themselves in high-paying fulfilling jobs. The first flaw in the argument stated is the assumption that 'all' students will secure high-paying jobs. The argument fails to consider those students who might dislike the subject or might be weak at it to even clear the credits, let alone sit for placements. Even if he or she manages to achieve the credits assigned and bags a job during the placements, how is one sure that he or she would lead a "fulfilling life" knowing the fact that they hate the subject. To lead a 'fulfilling life' by meaning, is no where near to landing a high profile job.
The argument further goes on to assume, every student studying computer programming to land a high-paying job which is an error in the argument itself. Every individual is born with different capabilities and skills. To assume, that each student is equally talented in one field because all are trained under one roof, is a another flaw in the argument. Further, as every individual has different skill sets, a data scientist role may not be the 'best job' for him as he might have an interest in soccer( for example). Thus, we cannot take into account that all the tudents would perform exceptionally and fetch high-paying jobs of software engineers when made to attend the computer programming classes.
Lastly, I do agree to the fact stated in the argument that even if they pursue other careers, they would atleast have learnt the basics of the technology which would help them in any industry
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1762 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.814 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.61 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.4 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 430, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... students will secure high-paying jobs. The argument fails to consider those studen...
^^^
Line 3, column 724, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...w is one sure that he or she would lead a 'fulfilling life' knowing the...
^
Line 3, column 840, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...o lead a fulfilling life by meaning, is no where near to landing a high profile jo...
^^
Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ause all are trained under one roof, is a another flaw in the argument. Further, ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96994535519 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7308972108 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540983606557 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5861918781 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.6875 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193272721228 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703950679482 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499122946714 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115867596647 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609129784766 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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