The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Peter Jones.
“In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Peter Jones plans to build a multi-million-dollar subway system. The subway will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses
serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about inconsistent buses and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Peter Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker
roductivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Mayor argue that building subway system, which will reduce traffice congestion, will ultimetely improve the economy of Briggsville. Howver, he failed to provide essential iformation on unstated assumption.
The first thing he assumed that is most of worker are working inside major downtown areas from which the subway will pass. But what if Briggsville is industrial town and worker daily commute to area different from downtown. So, building the subway system will not improve work effecienty at all.
Even if suppose mojority people are working in downtown, preference of Biggsville people also needs to consider. For instance, in case people prefer car instead of the subway becuase subway can not provide remote trasportation. Also inconsistency and lack of safety of bus service may hinder people from taking bus after arriving to subway station. In this situation traffic congestion is unlikely to do down.
Also, mayor did not stated population of worker and monetary value of improvement in workers' efficiency. The subway sytem is a multi-million-dollor project and finacial feasibility must be checked before arriving any conclusion of improvement in economy. Consider, only slight increase in productivity which is well below the project cost of the subway system can lead to downturn in Briggsville economy. And he were not sure about relation between productivity and time spend in traffic. People may spend time with their family instead of working.
In conclusion, Mayor Harrison assumed relationhsip between the subway system, Briggsville economy improvement and workers' productivity withous stating any clarification on Briggsville people preference, finacial feasibility and working location of people.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 259 350
No. of Characters: 1432 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.012 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.529 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.941 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.651 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
Mayor argue that building subway system, which will...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Mayor) must be used with a third-person verb: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
Mayor argue that building subway system, which will...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 229, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...y can not provide remote trasportation. Also inconsistency and lack of safety of bus...
^^^^
Line 13, column 21, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'state'
Suggestion: state
...ly to do down. Also, mayor did not stated population of worker and monetary value...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, well, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 259.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72200772201 5.12650576532 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01631150421 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586872586873 0.468620217663 125% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.2212758075 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2666666667 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217937289072 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719651980043 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644270356293 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13296206716 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381786204568 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.3550499002 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.6 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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