An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition
Nowadays, people are becoming aware and want to control every aspect of their life. Similarly, speaker argue that patient should have doctor's past history of disease they are treating which shows doctor's competence. However, in my doctor's treatment record is not sole reflection of doctor's qualification.
Record is only reflection of ressult of doctor's treatment not thier efford and competency. For example, there are certain diseases such as cancer and AIDS have very low treatment success ratio and showing that record may freak patient. In case of absence of addition doctor such as in African underdeveloped counties, patience may not servive due to lack of treatment or not complying with doctor. So, showing doctor's history is more detrimental that informative.
Secondly, reading record need basic knowledge of medical jargons and terms, while some countries do not have even 50% literacy ratio. Even if they have basic knowledge, they could not have medical tretment knowledge and this can lead to misconstrue of records. Patients can only interprete how many patient survive, while ignoring other technical factors such as stage of disease, other patient past medical record, habits and reaction to treatment. All this factor altimately decide success of treatment. Therefore, showing past treatment histry of doctor is not beneficial.
In conclusion, While it is good idea to show doctor's record to well educated medical field patient, for most cases it could be mis interpreted and can hamr doctor's reputation even if he achieved high success ratio compare to other.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 58.6224719101 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 2235.4752809 60% => OK
No of words: 248.0 442.535393258 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4314516129 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66931524676 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 215.323595506 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.600806451613 0.4932671777 122% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 704.065955056 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.1311888416 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.615384615 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.21951772744 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25146495655 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938876708346 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611020286519 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167227372637 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357512940398 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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