The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Peter
Jones.
“In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison
Peter Jones plans to build a multi-million-dollar subway system. The subway
will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses
serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been
complaining both about inconsistent buses and the general lack of safety
while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four
hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison
Peter Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker productivity,which will improve the economy of Briggsville.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated
assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends
on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the
assumptions prove unwarranted
The mayor of the town, Briggsville assumes that the productivity of the workers will increase and in turn improve the economy of the town, But his reasoning is based of faulty assumption and flawed arguments. The following assumption states below if proved unwarranted will weaken the assumption by the mayor's office.
The major expects an increase in workers productivity and inturn econiomic growth in the town of Briggsville as the mototrist will spend less time in traffic, this argument is flawed as, there is no data to show that all the workers use motor cars to commute to work and back from work. They may be using public busses or walking to work as they stay nearby to the working sites and offices. A clear idea of how the workers come to work can only clear this asuumptions. The mayor also thinks that subway syatems will allow the workers to come to work easily if they used to come by cars as now he thinks it will take them lesser time, this assumption is also flawed as he plans on connecting only the major downtown areas of the city, it may be that most of the workers stay in areas where the subway isn't connected to and still have to use thier own motorvehicles to commute to work or walk to work.
The mayor thinks he can reduce the trafic in te city by connecting it's major downtown areas by subway system which ease the trafic conditions of the city and eenable workers to commute to work easily, this assumption may prove unwarrented if we consider that traffic is caused in all of the town and not only in the major areas, and that most people dont stay in the downtown area but the midtown area, and commute to work in the outtown area. So they still have to take their cars or board busses to goto work. So, the subway syatem doesn't add any value to the problem and only becomes a waste of money.
He may build a new high tech subway system and people of the town may still now prefer ot over tradtional busses as it may be more expensive than the bus services, it may be that the new service is too costly and people don't turn to its aid. In this case the situation will remain same and may even worsen as the workers will keep taking the degrading bus services and being late for work and no increase in prodcutivity may take place.
The following factors show how even after adding a multi million dollar subway no clear economic growth is ensured in the city of Briggsville, one may argue that many of the workers get connected to their workplace increasing the efficienty of thier work as they waste less time in traffic, but no one can predict people would leave their habits and their perosnal cars for subway. People will not have sense of privacy in the subway whcih they have in their cars, they can take detours after work, which they can't in subway. So, in the following ways the assumption by the mayor if proved unwarrented, may collapse his dream of improving economy of his town.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 29 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 539 350
No. of Characters: 2358 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.818 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.375 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.259 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.76 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.627 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 304, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mayors'' or 'mayor's'?
Suggestion: mayors'; mayor's
...anted will weaken the assumption by the mayors office. The major expects an increas...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the assumption by the mayors office. The major expects an increase in workers pr...
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Line 3, column 802, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
... workers stay in areas where the subway isnt connected to and still have to use thie...
^^^^
Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...f we consider that traffic is caused in all of the town and not only in the major areas, a...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...n the major areas, and that most people dont stay in the downtown area but the midto...
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Line 5, column 535, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ses to goto work. So, the subway syatem doesnt add any value to the problem and only b...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...he new service is too costly and people dont turn to its aid. In this case the situa...
^^^^
Line 9, column 511, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...can take detours after work, which they cant in subway. So, in the following ways th...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2401.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 536.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47947761194 5.12650576532 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28584218345 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416044776119 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.8473053892 166% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 126.199732365 57.8364921388 218% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.5 119.503703932 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.2857142857 23.324526521 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.07142857143 5.70786347227 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143346624247 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562265828762 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354536573946 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918054807962 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279024546537 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 48.3550499002 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.3 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.1389221557 154% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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