The following memorandum is from the president of Primo Doll Manufacturing, Inc.
“According to a survey last year of parents who purchased the Elkie, our most popular
doll, 90 percent reported that although their children were extremely satisfied with the
doll’s features, the doll quickly wore out with use. In a follow-up survey of the same
parents, 80 percent reported that they would recommend a more durable version of the
doll to their friends. In response to these surveys, we have created the Elkie-Advanced
Doll, which has similar features to the original Elkie Doll but is manufactured using the
same higher quality materials used by Optima Doll Manufacturing, our most successful
competitor. Because parents can now purchase the beloved Elkie doll and be sure that it
won’t quickly wear out with use, we predict that our profits will exceed those of Optima
Doll Manufacturing this year.
In the memorandum for the Primo Doll manufacture's president states that most people who are buying Elkie dull to their kids, complaining about that dull, and need to live longer with their children. The president of that company responding to their comments on the dull decided to create a new version is a mingle of the best dull in the company with saving the previous (Elkie) features. He assumes based on these new changes; the company will sell as much as the most successful product. However, the author of this argument should provide more answers to the two following questions to evaluate the argument effectively.
Firstly, the argument assumes that if the company uses the same material for the most product in its quality will be able to sell much in this Elkie dull. But, this is an unwarranted assumption. The author should provide an answer if the number of those kids who are used to buying Elkie dull is the same number of those who are buying Optima dull. Moreover, it is not necessarily because the company made it from the same material that guaranteed sell them as the same quantity as the Optima. For example, if there are around 100,000 kids like to paly with Elie, will still the same even the company modify it as the best perfect one they have. If the above is true, the argument does not hold the water.
secondly, the argument supposes that those modifications in the Elkie dull will guarantee the best sells in the this dull, But if the kids like this specific dull; any changes will not contribute to the amount of selling; as the have loyalty to this dull; Therefore, it's not sure to depend on this unwarranted assumption to expect the sells for this dull. If the above scenario is valid, the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed. the author should provide more answers about mentioned questions, maybe in the form of systematic research study to be able to evaluate the argument effectively.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1639 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.683 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.466 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.385 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 306, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...dull decided to create a new version is a mingle of the best dull in the company with sa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...he argument does not hold the water. secondly, the argument supposes that those modif...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...e dull will guarantee the best sells in the this dull, But if the kids like this specifi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 70, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...s it stands now is considerably flawed. the author should provide more answers abou...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81714285714 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53980555258 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454285714286 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.3931914813 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.428571429 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105688245404 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392248542889 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736755375557 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0659543743712 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823474944129 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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