The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University."Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significa

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The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because online instruction takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at Humana University, we should initiate and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

Based on the success of online programs at Omni University, the president of Humana University is planning to begin online degree programs as well. In his opinion, this service will both help to attract new students and lessen the university budget’s shortage. In fact, the memorandum does not provide powerful reasons to be certain about this.

Since Humana University has faced budget struggles while spending more money on maintaining its buildings, the initiation of online courses is supposed to reduce the deficit. Even though, it is hazy how exactly the beginning of online programs will influence this problem in a beneficial way. For instance, to start these courses the university needs to have modern computers, the good Internet access as well as enough IT staff to avoid technical problems. If the university does not have these human and technical resources currently, it has to spend the great amount of money before promoting online programs.

Although, some arguments can weaken this conclusion. For example, the number of students will not increase, because students are interested in neither campus nor online programs of this university. Maybe Humana University is low-ranked and provides the low quality of education; therefore, students prefer applying for other universities. That is why launching online programs will not turn this situation around.

Even if Humana University is famous for its good education; the idea of promoting such online programs as Omni does looks irrelevant. The main reason is that, perhaps, Omni University provides law courses which this university is famous for. On the other hand, Humana University may be incompetent in law programs. There is no point to adapt Omni’s programs, because it will not lead to success as well, because between these two online programs students will choose Omni’s courses over Humana’s ones.

To sum up, based on the provided arguments in this essay, there is no point is assuming that initiating online courses will help to reduce the budget deficit and attract new students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ne programs will influence this problem in a beneficial way. For instance, to start these courses t...
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...od Internet access as well as enough IT staff to avoid technical problems. If the uni...
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ey before promoting online programs. Although, some arguments can weaken this conclus...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...s will help to reduce the budget deficit and attract new students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 328.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39024390244 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75587496403 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524390243902 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7289898482 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.70786347227 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22982963597 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843304789968 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717574158869 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137473620196 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828600221023 0.0628817314937 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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