The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort
hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have
opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to
improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course
and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to
decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how
the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The recommendation put forward by the mayor of the town Hopewell is likely to not have the predicted
results because there are various loopholes and understated assumptions that are not considered while
reaching to the stated claim that building a similar golf course and hotel will result in same success.
Firstly, the Ocean View was built two years before and it is not clearly justified that the conditions are
same as they were earlier - which is a rare case. There can be various changes in the economy and the
current situation of the society may not favor another resort like Ocean View.
Secondly, the relation between the increase in tourism and opening up of the new businesses is not
justified as there can be the case the profits are majorly earned from the hotel bookings and the
businesses are contributing less towards the income. Also, the credibility of the survey is not stated as
well as the survey can be biased towards stating the results. The questions asked in the survey can
mold the results as if there is only one resort in the city, then they will favor it hence stating the
increasing interest in the resort. Also, the people surveyed can be limited and that who are interested in
tourism. The local population might not be interested in such an idea as it will increase the population of
the city making it crowded and hence less peaceful. The survey can be done with the general population
and be taking a more general idea of questions.
Even if the above claims are taken into account, the location where the Ocean View is located attracts the
tourists which not might be the same case if other resorts are built to some other locations. Golf is a game
of rich people and hence, the economy near the new resort location might not be same as it is near
Ocean View making the golf course in new locations invaluable. A better consideration can be taken to
build the sports facilities that are congruent with the social needs and status.
Hence, the argument is not valid that similar revenues can be earned building similar golf course and
hotel to Ocean View in other locations.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK, but there is no survey in the topic.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1713 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.617 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.391 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.818 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80592991914 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45003692743 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450134770889 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.2859065831 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.153846154 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5384615385 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 5.15768463074 427% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174399209715 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643508752099 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647432089877 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0561466761018 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697520091315 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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