Write a response in which you discuss the extent to
which you agree or disagree with the recommendation
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In
developing and supporting your position, describe
specific circumstances in which adopting the
recommendation would or would not be advantageous
and explain how these examples shape your position.
The idea of same curriculum puts restrictions on the creativity that is very much required for the advancement in the society.
Knowledge is the key to success and advancement that the humans have achieved. Starting from the early man, the knowledge of how the fire is generated paved a way for the future inventions with require fire or took inspiration from fire for the energy and light like the light bulb. But if Thomas A. Edison had have followed the same path and curriculum that was being followed at that time will he be able to do this invention? Einstein, dropped out of the school to learn in his own way as structure of education that was provided was not appropriate for him as he wanted to do something breakthrough and explore beyond the established knowledge field. So the idea we can get from the above mentioned examples is that if there is a fixed study curriculum for the nation, it would create stiffness and strictness to follow the same sheep trail and is deletrious for the creativity and curiosity.
Following the same cirriculum would create an environment where there is competition based on the same criteria, for example, if there are two students where one likes to learn by reading from the books about a particular topic say how energy is produced from the lithium battery and other student being pragmatic implements and see how the battery actually produces the energy, if we now we have only a single cirriculum in which everything is taught using the books we would be never able to see the benefits of the other side and might miss on the students who can do much better by not following the given pavement of the knowledge. Ignoring this fact that one person can be talent in doing the same thing in some other way rather than the given path can have negative impact on the future of the student as student might not find oneself self sufficient to futher persue the studies as they were not given the freedom to choose from the different criterias which suits best for them. A student might be interested to learn by taking as many tests as possible while the other student finds to perfectly learn a concept and then look over the mistakes.
The education system that follows a fixed curriculum for the nation also poses a threat that students might not be able to find that what interests them most and what to pursue in there future. As for the case where as student wants to learn deep about the deep space object by going and observing thorugh the space observatory stations but the school forces the student to create a project report rather than going and see the practical usage and purpose of the thing, this might first, reduce the students curiosity to learn the way they want to follow as they'll be not rewarded for that and secondly, it would hard for a student to go beyond the given guidelines and follow their heart.
It can be seen as the fact that the curiosity and creativity always leads to the most amazing inventions and achievements of the human kind be it Appollo Moon Exploration or the invention of the telephone. Hence, breaking the given conventions
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...light bulb. But if Thomas A. Edison had have followed the same path and curriculum t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m the books about a particular topic say how energy is produced from the lithium ...
^^
Line 7, column 211, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...pursue in there future. As for the case where as student wants to learn deep about the d...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 500, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...the thing, this might first, reduce the students curiosity to learn the way they want to...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 559, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they'll
...to learn the way they want to follow as theyll be not rewarded for that and secondly, ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, while, as for, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2579.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 551.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68058076225 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49467534185 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459165154265 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 23.0359550562 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 165.580688142 60.3974514979 274% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 184.214285714 118.986275619 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.3571428571 23.4991977007 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0467481110508 0.243740707755 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0167538318508 0.0831039109588 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0142488749498 0.0758088955206 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0257358312062 0.150359130593 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138967094096 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 14.1392134831 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.2143820225 157% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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