The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Keeping morale among students and for holding it's long standing alumnae support, the Grove College's governing committee decided to continue it's feminine education.This argument distorts the view of the situation by manipulating facts and provides dubious piece of evidence. However, scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support and the argument which is presented to validate the conclusion is flawed. Let me address them one by one.
First of all,the memorandum unsubtantially assumes that according to the old tradition if they continue only educating female students they will find their alumnae support which is merely a supposition without solid ground.For example, the alumnae in their professional life realize that if they can find co-education in theircollege, it would be easy for them to accomodate properly with their professional life as they have to be handle masculine client also.So, alumnae may try to provoke college authority to make a co-education ground for getting the support which they provided form the past.If this is the factor that influence the ex-student then continuing from previous tradition might be an abortive idea.
Furthermore, argument superficially claims that 80% students think that only female education will be helpful for their morale. As we don't know the total number of students we can not tell the number of students who already want co-education. if there is 100 thousands students then it might not be a good idea to belittle the opine of 20 thousands students.
Finally, the momoramndum cites that students will decide the future plan of what school authority might do. Is it wise to take decission according to the opine from students ? as they are a learner they don't know what happened and going around outside world, so they could not judge any decision.It would be wise to take decision from them who already pass only female and co-education phase so that he/she may be able to make a good descrepency among this two.so without convincing answers to this question the reader is left with the impression that the claim made by the author are more of a wistfukl thinking rather than a substantive evidence.
In conclution, If the Grove college authority takes into account the fallacies mention above, then they may be able to make a well informed decision about new enroll students and bolsters their argument with lucid concrete evidence.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2003 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.008 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.687 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.345 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.647 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nd their alumnae support which is merely a supposition without solid ground.For e...
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...pport which they provided form the past.If this is the factor that influence the ...
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...form the past.If this is the factor that influence the ex-student then continuing...
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...ation will be helpful for their morale. As we dont know the total number of studen...
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...students who already want co-education. if there is 100 thousands students then it...
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...students who already want co-education. if there is 100 thousands students then it...
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...take decision from them who already pass only female and co-education phase so th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, well, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 391.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23529411765 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77968880941 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537084398977 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 195.787158849 57.8364921388 339% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 186.090909091 119.503703932 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5454545455 23.324526521 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122310320711 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411756297117 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048105729761 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0725118544565 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269881993753 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 14.3799401198 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.197005988 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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