The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"Recently, there have been discussions about ending Grove College's century-old tradition of all-female education by admitting male students into our programs. At a recent faculty meeting, a majority of faculty members voted in favor of co-education, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. However, Grove students, both past and present, are against the idea of coeducation. Eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Therefore, we recommend maintaining Grove College's tradition of all-female education. We predict that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president and the administrative staff of Grove College recommned that they uphold their century-old tradition of all-female eduation to improve the morale among students and to receive financial support from the alumnaedespite the majority of the faculty voting in favor of co-eduation. They suggest this based on a survey in which more than eighty percent of the participants wanted all-female education as well as based on another survey in which over half of the alumnae opposed coeduation. However, before the recommendation can be properly evalauted, one would require answers to the following questions.
Firstly, are the results from the survey conducted by the student government representative of the school population. The author does not provide any details about how the survey was carried out. There is a possibility that the sample chosen for the survey was a biased sample and hence, most of the participants in the survey favored for all-female education. Furthermore, it is possible that the sample size chosen was not big enough to represent the entire school population. If the mentioned fallacies are present in the survery, then the author's line of reasoning is sigificantly weakened.
Secondly, how many of the alumnae who favored all-female education support the college financially? The author prematurely assumes that implementing co-education would decrease the financial support from the alumnae. However, there is a possibility that very few alumnae who favored all female education support the college financially. On the other hand, it is possible to increase the financial support from the alumnae if co-education is implemented in the college as there is another half of the almnae who are not against co-education and everyone is willing to support the college financially. If this turns out to be true, the author's plan to keep the financial support by the alumnae unabated falls flat on its face.
Finally, what is the motive behind the majority of the faculty supporting co-education? Since the facutly is intellectually sound as well as they are the ones who interact with the students the most, it would be fatuous to shrug off their opinion. Perhaps, they feel that the students get to learn better in a co-education environment than in an all-female milieu. In a co-education system, students get to view a subject from different perspectives which enhances their knowledge. If such is the thought process in the minds of the faculty, then the author's insistence on would do more harm to the students than good.
Therefore, the argument, as it stands, is unpersuasive as the author do not provide any details addressing the above posed questions. One will be in a better position to evaluate the argument if the author can furnish information that would help answer the above questions in a detailes manner leaving no room for ambiguity.
Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: They suggest this based on a survey in which more than eighty percent of the participants wanted all-female education as well as based on another survey in which over half of the alumnae opposed coeduation.
Description: The fragment alumnae opposed coeduation is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace opposed with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Sentence: Secondly, how many of the alumnae who favored all-female education support the college financially?
Description: The fragment education support the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace support with verb, past tense
Sentence: However, there is a possibility that very few alumnae who favored all female education support the college financially.
Description: The fragment education support the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace support with verb, past tense
Sentence: If such is the thought process in the minds of the faculty, then the author's insistence on would do more harm to the students than good.
Description: The token on is not usually followed by a modal auxillary
Suggestion: Refer to on and would
Sentence: One will be in a better position to evaluate the argument if the author can furnish information that would help answer the above questions in a detailes manner leaving no room for ambiguity.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to detailes and manner
Sentence: The president and the administrative staff of Grove College recommned that they uphold their century-old tradition of all-female eduation to improve the morale among students and to receive financial support from the alumnaedespite the majority of the faculty voting in favor of co-eduation.
Error: recommned Suggestion: recommend
Error: co-eduation Suggestion: conduction
Error: century-old Suggestion: century old
Error: alumnaedespite Suggestion: alumna despite
Error: all-female Suggestion: all female
Error: eduation Suggestion: education
Sentence: They suggest this based on a survey in which more than eighty percent of the participants wanted all-female education as well as based on another survey in which over half of the alumnae opposed coeduation.
Error: coeduation Suggestion: conduction
Error: all-female Suggestion: all female
Sentence: However, before the recommendation can be properly evalauted, one would require answers to the following questions.
Error: evalauted Suggestion: evaluated
Sentence: There is a possibility that the sample chosen for the survey was a biased sample and hence, most of the participants in the survey favored for all-female education.
Error: all-female Suggestion: all female
Sentence: If the mentioned fallacies are present in the survery, then the author's line of reasoning is sigificantly weakened.
Error: survery Suggestion: survey
Error: sigificantly Suggestion: significantly
Sentence: Secondly, how many of the alumnae who favored all-female education support the college financially?
Error: all-female Suggestion: all female
Sentence: The author prematurely assumes that implementing co-education would decrease the financial support from the alumnae.
Error: co-education Suggestion: coeducation
Sentence: On the other hand, it is possible to increase the financial support from the alumnae if co-education is implemented in the college as there is another half of the almnae who are not against co-education and everyone is willing to support the college financially.
Error: almnae Suggestion: alone
Error: co-education Suggestion: coeducation
Sentence: Finally, what is the motive behind the majority of the faculty supporting co-education?
Error: co-education Suggestion: coeducation
Sentence: Since the facutly is intellectually sound as well as they are the ones who interact with the students the most, it would be fatuous to shrug off their opinion.
Error: facutly Suggestion: faculty
Error: fatuous Suggestion: famous
Sentence: Perhaps, they feel that the students get to learn better in a co-education environment than in an all-female milieu.
Error: milieu Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: co-education Suggestion: coeducation
Error: all-female Suggestion: all female
Sentence: In a co-education system, students get to view a subject from different perspectives which enhances their knowledge.
Error: co-education Suggestion: coeducation
Sentence: Therefore, the argument, as it stands, is unpersuasive as the author do not provide any details addressing the above posed questions.
Error: unpersuasive Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: One will be in a better position to evaluate the argument if the author can furnish information that would help answer the above questions in a detailes manner leaving no room for ambiguity.
Error: detailes Suggestion: details
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Read a good grammar book.
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
Double check spelling errors.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 463 350
No. of Characters: 2381 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.639 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.143 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.92 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.188 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...hey feel that the students get to learn better in a co-education environment than in a...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 552, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...s in the minds of the faculty, then the authors insistence on would do more harm to the...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2432.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 463.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25269978402 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99854810172 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466522678186 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 774.0 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1114359447 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.6 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.15 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1294387584 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395710355494 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587477624377 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0680630794841 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661111039575 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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