The advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company suggests that a greater share of its budget should be allocated by the Super Screen next year for advertising in order to spread awareness among the public that the movie-content produced is of good quality. However, the recommendation would not produce the desired results as expected because the claim on which it is made is clearly flawed and devoid of shreds of evidence.
To commence with, the argument itself clearly states that the number of people attended Super Screen-produced movies are fewer current year than in any other year. Consequently, the number of viewers reviewing the movie is less this year. Making a judgement that the percentage of positive reviews are higher this year is incomparable with other year's data as one can compare the percentage only when the number of people is consistent in both the year. Hence, the argument is clearly flawed.
Secondly, the argument claims that due to the lack of dissemination of their work, they are not getting previews holding the fact that people are unaware of their content. While the claim can be true, it lacks the proper evidence to consider the assumption that people are unaware. The advertising director makes a correlation between the number of people aware of their content and people giving the review which is unsubstantial. For instance, not all individuals fill the feedback book when they visit any restaurant, this does not mean they are not aware of the quality of food. Only if the argument with some evidence, it can be considered as a factor towards the final result of the recommendation.
Furthermore, the recommendation that allocation of a greater budget with certainly contribute to increase in people reviewing the movie is unconvincing and weak.
In summary, the recommendation could be expected to bring desired results only if the argument has provided with proper pieces of evidence. Making a statement that will produce the desired results on the basis of assumptions has no legs to stand on and will definitely leads to failure
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1724 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.012 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.805 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.147 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.622 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...er this year is incomparable with other years data as one can compare the percentage ...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 270, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...no legs to stand on and will definitely leads to failure
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12790697674 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87011512726 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497093023256 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.902139284 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207520398491 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700352518878 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959769074544 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113187367823 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878613712297 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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