The following was written by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.
"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. At present, the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. In addition, there is ample evidence of the popularity of jazz in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.' Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We, therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The developers states that establishing a jazz club will bring profit due to the popularity of jazz in Monroe. However, there are many unsubstantiated assumptions in the argument that need to be address by the developers.
First of all, the developers assumed that the C note will have a substantial market share of customers due to its location. However, they might overlooked that there might be other forms of jazz entertainments in Monroe. Hotels and restaurants are able to held jazz shows by inviting musicians and bands. The shows might already be very popular among the locals that establishing another jazz club will not able to gain all the market. Moreover, if there are no jazz club currently located in Monroe. Market analysis probably figured out that people in Monroe do not prefer attending jazz club shows as jazz entertainment but to listen radio shows or watch TV about jazz. Opening a jazz club downtown Monroe might be ignored by the locals. Thus, before deciding to establish C note, being aware of the habits of Monroe locals are essential.
Secondly, the developers assumed jazz is popular in Monroe by judging that a enormous amount of people attended jazz festival last summer. However, we have to know whether the crowd are mostly from Monroe or by other cites. Perhaps the jazz festival is an international event that draws people from all over the world. Therefore, evidences need to be provided to show that a high percentage of the audience is from Monroe. Moreover, the developers only offered last year's data of audience. How about two years before? Or the summer before a decade? It might be possible that last year a famous jazz musician came to the festival so it allured a titanic crowd. There is probably no entrance fees to the festival due to the mayor of Monroe wants to boost Monroe's tourism. Therefore, the developers need to look more deeply about the reason of the popular festival.
Last but not least, the developers assume that C note will make money because fans tend to spend substantial amount of money on jazz due to a nation wide study. However a nationwide study cannot accurately reflect Monroe's fans. Monroe's fans probably spend little amount of money on entertainment and tend to seek the free ways to enjoy jazz. Therefore, the developers should provide a study done on Monroe's locals.
In conclusion, the argument is based on several crucial but unproven assumptions addressed by the developers.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2003 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.838 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.607 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.56 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.093 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'state'.
Suggestion: state
The developers states that establishing a jazz club will brin...
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Line 5, column 468, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'clubs'?
Suggestion: clubs
... market. Moreover, if there are no jazz club currently located in Monroe. Market ana...
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Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...zz is popular in Monroe by judging that a enormous amount of people attended jazz...
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Line 9, column 467, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...eover, the developers only offered last years data of audience. How about two years b...
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Line 13, column 143, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
...antial amount of money on jazz due to a nation wide study. However a nationwide study canno...
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Line 13, column 162, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ney on jazz due to a nation wide study. However a nationwide study cannot accurately re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97826086957 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67407014188 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5648387453 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.44 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.56 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291923628885 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863642692381 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797953181134 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154682999888 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102156783849 0.0628817314937 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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