“If we want to save money on municipal garbage disposal fees, we need to encourage our residents to recycle more. Late last year, our neighboring town, Hayesworth, passed a law requiring that all households recycle paper and glass, or pay a fine. Since that time, Hayesworth has seen its garbage disposal costs significantly decrease. If we implemented an advertising campaign encouraging our residents to recycle, Masontown would also save money on disposal of its waste.”
The author of this argument is trying to promote recycling in Masontown which would further help them in saving money on disposal of its waste.To support this argument he takes an example of their neighbouring town of Hayesworth where recycling was implemented.To further support it he states that a law was passed in Hayesworth to increase recycling which inturn helped them in saving cost on disposal of garbage. Nevertheless, on closer scrutiny, it is seen that the argument provides scant evidence that can prove the validity of the recommendation made.
Firstly, a threshold assumption upon which the recommendation relies is that their neighbouring town of Hayesworth has implemented recycling techniques to save costs on disposal of garbage.This assumption is specious as it is quite likely that both these towns differ in various factors regarding their garbage disposal.It might be that Masontown does not produce recyclable waste as much as Hayesworth ,this weakens the authors assumption. The author should have provided us with evidence which states the similarities in the manner of garbage disposed in both these towns.
Secondly,the law which the author states that has helped Hayesworth in reducing disposal costs is unclear.The author should have provided us with statistical evidence which would have given us a clear picture of the “significant decrease” in disposal costs which the author is stating in his argument. Also it might happen that the citizens of Hayesworth where already disciplined and used to treat their garbage in a proper manner.Taking this into account their law would not make any significant difference to their disposal techniques.
Finally,the advertising campaign which the author is suggesting to encourage their citizens about recycling is spurious.Since it is not mentioned how effective this advertisement will turn out.Even if we consider that this advertisement will help in encouraging people towards recycling , it is still dubious as we do not know how many people will actually follow it . The claim that the author is making about saving money should have been illustrated further , as the author should have stated how much money will be approximately saved with the passage of this law which could create a significant impact on his argument.
In conclusion, I would say that, the author's argument is filled with flaws and incomplete and incogent reasons.To make his argument more persuasive the author should provide us with evidence stating the similarities of garbage disposal techniques in both towns.The author should also provide us with statistical evidence regarding the significant decrease in cost of garbage disposal. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 440 350
No. of Characters: 2302 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.58 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.232 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.826 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.427 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.44 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.71 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.21 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 28.8173652695 184% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53271028037 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05680910619 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450934579439 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.412167159 57.8364921388 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 236.8 119.503703932 198% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.8 23.324526521 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2 5.70786347227 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156840351916 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663425351357 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522254933886 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100710545602 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418473392812 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.0 14.3799401198 181% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 20.39 48.3550499002 42% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 12.197005988 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.68 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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