An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Vitamins are essential for life, and can come from various sources. The people of Tagus have experiencing the deficiency of vitamin A. In the response and international organization have developed the hybreed of millet, which has more vitamin A content. The cost is high, but government is planning to subsidize the rates, so that farmers can afford it. And author claims that, as the millet is a staple food in Tagus, the people will readily adopt the new breed of millet, which in result can help them fight against vitamin A deficiency. The author's claim seems fair and might work, however there are many underlying assumptions, if not answered then, might fail the entire mission.
The first arising question is to find the reason of vitamin A deficiency. Is it throughout the entire nation, or some particular area. Regular diet should provide all necessary vitamins and protiens, but if people are experiencing the deficiency of vitamin A, then there might be the problem with the daily diet. Before going further, first a diet expert should examine the diet carefully, it might be the only small change which can solve the problem.
The second questions is regarding the subsidies, will the government provid the enough subsidies to get the new breed of millet at the same rate. For some genetically modified plants the seeds of cultivation does not work for next farming, and farmers have no choice to buy the seeds again. Thus if government is not planning to provide sufficient subsidies for quite longer time, the solution will show only temporary effect.
Moreover, the author assumed that due to the fact that millet is the part of regular diet of people, they will readily accept the new breed of millet. There are many coutries which are not accepting genetically modified products for their regular consumtions, and there fear is also legit in some cases. It is also noted that some breeds have nagative effect on consumption for longer time. Even if there is no negetive effect proven, the belief or strong dislike for modified product might lead to lower acceptance. Thus might not solve the issue of deficiency.
Although due to the assumptions noted the suggested method might not work, there areplenty of possibilities to consider. In India, before a decade, they were facing the deficiency if Iron in the state of Andhra Pradesh. After trying many solutions they came with idea of mergin the solution with their belief system. They provided a metal fish to each household facing the problem. And told them to use it to cook their daily food, just keep it in the vessel while cooking. The local people was worshipping the fish, so they promoted by the fact that using it while cooking will solve your problems. This kid of scheme can be implemented for nation of Tagus as well.
In summary, before going further with any solutions metioned, it is important to answer all the assumptions and problem related that solutions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Regular diet should provide all necessary vitamins and protiens, but if people are experiencing the deficiency of vitamin A, then there might be the problem with the daily diet.
Error: protiens Suggestion: proteins
Sentence: The second questions is regarding the subsidies, will the government provid the enough subsidies to get the new breed of millet at the same rate.
Error: provid Suggestion: proved
Sentence: There are many coutries which are not accepting genetically modified products for their regular consumtions, and there fear is also legit in some cases.
Error: legit Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: coutries Suggestion: countries
Error: consumtions Suggestion: consumptions
Sentence: It is also noted that some breeds have nagative effect on consumption for longer time.
Error: nagative Suggestion: negative
Sentence: Even if there is no negetive effect proven, the belief or strong dislike for modified product might lead to lower acceptance.
Error: negetive Suggestion: negative
Sentence: Although due to the assumptions noted the suggested method might not work, there areplenty of possibilities to consider.
Error: areplenty Suggestion: repent
Sentence: After trying many solutions they came with idea of mergin the solution with their belief system.
Error: mergin Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The local people was worshipping the fish, so they promoted by the fact that using it while cooking will solve your problems.
Error: worshipping Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In summary, before going further with any solutions metioned, it is important to answer all the assumptions and problem related that solutions.
Error: metioned Suggestion: mentioned
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly. need to argue:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 497 350
No. of Characters: 2389 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.722 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.807 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.458 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.88 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.575 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.254 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... have no choice to buy the seeds again. Thus if government is not planning to provid...
^^^^
Line 7, column 518, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...product might lead to lower acceptance. Thus might not solve the issue of deficiency...
^^^^
Line 9, column 221, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...if Iron in the state of Andhra Pradesh. After trying many solutions they came with id...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, then, thus, well, while, in summary, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 497.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.953722334 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53795322961 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501006036217 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.67365269461 478% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.92957114 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6923076923 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1153846154 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312124639864 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077993666736 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803818696005 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13749333114 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101857825078 0.0628817314937 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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