Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have

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Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.

It has been given that Pirouettes Ballet School is top choice for any child. As compare to all schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes have better program and the teachers with experiecne of presenting their dance in companies worldwide. It is also stated that, many students of Pirouettes have gone on to top dance companies to become professional dancers. In my opinion, Pirouettes is might be great school for dancing, but the decision of enrollement of a child, can not be taken by the information given. There are missing and assumed informations, which needs to be answered.

The first assumption is, the Pirouettes Ballet School is first choice for any child. In my view, it is based on child's choice, whether he or she wants to learn ballet and enroll in a dance school. And if the child wants to go for ballet, which particular area in dance he or she wants to focus on. The pirouettes might have the most intesive progtam as compare to other schools in the Elmtown, but it might not be the choice area of student. For instance, one students wants to do Computer Engineering, and he chooses a college which has most intensive course in Mechanical Engineering.

The second assumption is, the teachers have danced for most prestigious bellet companies worldwide. The teachers might have danced for companies, but it is not stated that, whether it is because their talents or because the school has some understanding with companies. The school board, the head or the public relation officer might have good connects with some well known bellet companies, and that might be the reason many teachers have danced internationally.

The third assumption is that, many of the past studetns have gone to top dance companies to further enhance their skill and become professional dancer. A child at later stage has to go to the dance companies to become professional, then impact of choosing the Pirouettes, on getting selected in top dance companies must be evaluated. There is possibility that other schools are also had students which are currently working at top dance companies. If at the later stage the selection in dance companies is based on talent only, regardless of from which school an individual is coming, then the Pirouettes should not be the first choice of child.

In sumamry, as per the given information, the Pirouettes Ballet Schools seems clear choice, but before making a decision there are many underlying assumptions, that are taken for granted. These assumptions and questions needs to be answered to take a unbiased decision.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...enrollement of a child, can not be taken by the information given. There are miss...
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... has some understanding with companies. The school board, the head or the public re...
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...eachers have danced internationally. The third assumption is that, many of the p...
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... questions needs to be answered to take a unbiased decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, third, well, as to, for instance, in my opinion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01176470588 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78259941701 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421176470588 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3446371987 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.105263158 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3684210526 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.49038476115 0.218282227539 225% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166486817173 0.0743258471296 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092016293733 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275641407773 0.128457276422 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942696073229 0.0628817314937 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Sentence: As compare to all schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes have better program and the teachers with experiecne of presenting their dance in companies worldwide.
Error: experiecne Suggestion: experience

Sentence: In my opinion, Pirouettes is might be great school for dancing, but the decision of enrollement of a child, can not be taken by the information given.
Error: enrollement Suggestion: enrollment

Sentence: The pirouettes might have the most intesive progtam as compare to other schools in the Elmtown, but it might not be the choice area of student.
Error: intesive Suggestion: intensive
Error: progtam Suggestion: program

Sentence: The second assumption is, the teachers have danced for most prestigious bellet companies worldwide.
Error: bellet Suggestion: belle

Sentence: The school board, the head or the public relation officer might have good connects with some well known bellet companies, and that might be the reason many teachers have danced internationally.
Error: bellet Suggestion: belle

Sentence: The third assumption is that, many of the past studetns have gone to top dance companies to further enhance their skill and become professional dancer.
Error: studetns Suggestion: students

Sentence: In sumamry, as per the given information, the Pirouettes Ballet Schools seems clear choice, but before making a decision there are many underlying assumptions, that are taken for granted.
Error: sumamry Suggestion: summary

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Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2069 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.868 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.677 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.807 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5