An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
It is highly dubious that the new breed of millet will be successful to eliminate the vitamin A deficiency in the nation. The claim that this new breed of millet will aid in fighting vitamin A deficiency is based on ungrounded assumptions and there are several fallacies to the claim. Complete research has not been done to guarantee the efficiency of the new breed of millet and if there are any other ways to fight this problem. So, it is unlikely that the new breed of millet is the appropriate solution to the problem.
Firstly, it is only stated that the millet is high in Vitamin A but it is not indicated that the vitamin is readily absorbed by the human body. The content may be too much for body to digest. It is also not indicated that the new breed of millet has contents not suitable for human health. The new millet is marketed to solve problem without actually testing the product.
Furthermore, it is not indicated that the climate is suitable for the new breed of millet. It is assumed that the millet will flourish in the same climate as the previous breeds. Also it is assumed that people will readily accept the new breed because it is a staple diet. But what if it tastes different and not liked by the people. a good amount of research work is seen pending in this region.
Lastly, looking from financial perspective, it does not seem like the most cost effective method. It is said that the seeds are costly and farmers will be given subsidies but no information is available whether the subsidy will be enough to adopt this new breed. Also, there might be other ways to supply vitamin A at he cost of providing subsidies. No financial data is available to assure that this is the most economical option.
Thus we can see that there are several fallacies to this plan of fighting vitamin A deficiency. The assumptions are baseless and more research needs to be done so that most suitable method is applied. To conclude we can say that the new breed of millet is not likely to produce the desired result.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1630 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.454 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.393 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.263 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.504 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.362 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 63, Rule ID: A_BUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
...ated that the millet is high in Vitamin A but it is not indicated that the vitamin is...
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Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...he same climate as the previous breeds. Also it is assumed that people will readily ...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: A
... different and not liked by the people. a good amount of research work is seen pe...
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Line 4, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ncial perspective, it does not seem like the most cost effective method. It is sa...
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Line 4, column 315, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... might be other ways to supply vitamin A at he cost of providing subsidies. No fi...
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Line 4, column 317, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at the cost'?
Suggestion: at the cost
...ight be other ways to supply vitamin A at he cost of providing subsidies. No financial da...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...at this is the most economical option. Thus we can see that there are several falla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, look, may, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55191256831 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46354773751 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439890710383 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 528.3 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1987179224 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.3 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452339078972 0.218282227539 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137460447235 0.0743258471296 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977930368676 0.0701772020484 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248193264656 0.128457276422 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801342549696 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.3799401198 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.3550499002 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.197005988 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 12.5979740519 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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