An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
According to the stated argument, the author discusses a solution to vitamin A deficiency by providing, through bioengineering, a type of food that is high in vitamin A, therefore, providing the population the necessary vitamin A supply. although this argument seems reasonable in various aspects, it lacks various supportive elements and evidence in order to support it.
First all, the author neglected to point out the reason behind the problem of vitamin A deficiency. In fact, vitamin A deficiency has many reasons ranging from heredity to environmental and each reason is accompanied with a solution of its own. therefore, providing vitamin A-enriched millet might not provide an ultimate solution to the problem of vitamin A deficiency considering that each vitamin A deficiency might have a different origin and therefore, might possess a different susceptibility to the breed of millet. therefore, the argument is lacking in that aspect as the author discusses the breed of millet to be the ultimate solution which may not be the case.
Second, although the interest of farmer is logical considering that despite the seeds of millet being costly, the farmers will receive a sum of money for farming millets. however, the authot does not provide enoug data regarding the percent of payment compared to the cost of the seeds. considering that farmers are amenable to farming millets since farmers are generally viewed as low class, it is possible that the amount of money they receive might be sufficient enough to cover the cost of seeds that they already paid for.
Thirdly, what distinguishes the new breed of millet to the original one? why is the general population interested in adopting this variety despite being a classical one already on the market? the author discusses that people will "readily" adopt this new modified variety of breed without providing enough explanation to what makes this variety more advantageous to the one already placed in the marker. it is possible that this new variety might possess a higher amount of vitamin A, although the auithor did not provide any data regarding the research behind this idea.
Finally, combatting vitamin A deficienty is considered the primary goal to promote this product in Tagus. the author discuss the motifs behind the government's interest to tout this new product. however, the author didn't explaion the types of measure that must be endured in order to ensure the people's desires to buy this product. As mentioned in the previous paragraphs, it is obvious that this new bioengineered type of food, is costy and no research was provided to explain its efficiency in battling vitamin A deficiency. Furthermore, what could trigger the people's interest in buying this new product if another variant form is already in the market which could be more economical that the new one.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2345 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.043 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.739 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 195 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 157 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 28.236 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.653 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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According to the stated argument, the au...
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...ulation the necessary vitamin A supply. although this argument seems reasonable in vario...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...nd evidence in order to support it. First all, the author neglected to point...
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Suggestion: Therefore
...accompanied with a solution of its own. therefore, providing vitamin A-enriched millet mi...
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Suggestion: Therefore
... susceptibility to the breed of millet. therefore, the argument is lacking in that aspect...
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...solution which may not be the case. Second, although the interest of farmer ...
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...ive a sum of money for farming millets. however, the authot does not provide enoug data...
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Suggestion: Considering
...ment compared to the cost of the seeds. considering that farmers are amenable to farming mi...
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...of seeds that they already paid for. Thirdly, what distinguishes the new bree...
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...ew breed of millet to the original one? why is the general population interested in...
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... a classical one already on the market? the author discusses that people will &apos...
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...o the one already placed in the marker. it is possible that this new variety might...
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...ding the research behind this idea. Finally, combatting vitamin A deficienty...
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... goal to promote this product in Tagus. the author discuss the motifs behind the go...
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Line 9, column 122, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'discusses'.
Suggestion: discusses
...omote this product in Tagus. the author discuss the motifs behind the governments inter...
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...ents interest to tout this new product. however, the author didnt explaion the types of...
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Line 9, column 219, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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...t this new product. however, the author didnt explaion the types of measure that must...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, third, thirdly, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2410.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19396551724 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85051351842 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456896551724 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0540964462 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.888888889 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7777777778 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36943514637 0.218282227539 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112851686097 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528574662602 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190435510003 0.128457276422 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290480489874 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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