An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
There are multiple flaws in the given argument the major flaw is that it assumes that new breed of millers will remove the deficiency of vitamin A in the people of Tagus.The problem is that no information whether the millet will fulfill the daily requirements of vitamin A in a humans body.This assumption can be strengthened by providing more information regarding the amount of vitamin A in the millet and the required amount of vitamin A required to remove deficiency from the body.Hence we can determine the effectiveness of the solution provided.
There is another assumption that all farmers will agree to farming the new costly millet seeds because they are providing subsidies.The problem is that no information is given whether the subsidies covers the entire extra cost of the seeds as cost is an important factor for the farmers.It can be strengthened by giving information about the willingness of farmers to try the new seeds and the amount of subsidy given on the seeds.This will help evaluate the mindset of the farmers regarding the new seeds and their cost of production.
It is assumed that the staple of all in Tagus is millet but there is no information regarding their source is given.Hence we cannot tell whether the diet of the entire population consists of millet or not.This assumption can be strengthened by providing more information about the group of people on whom the survey was done and more information regarding the survey which has provided with such information.This will help us determine whether millet is actually the crop which feeds the mass of the country.
It is assumed that vitamin A deficiency can be only due to lack of minerals in their food but there could be other reasons such as lack of sunlight in the region which prevent the absorption of the vitamin A that is consumed by the body.This assumption can be strengthened by providing more information regarding the causes of vitamin A deficiency in the people in Tagus.
Hence it can be concluded that more information regarding the daily requirements of vitamin A ,the causes of the deficiency of vitamin A as well as information about the willingness of the farmers to grow the crop are the necessary information required to determine whether the recommendation is likely to get the predicted result.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1898 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.781 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.804 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 49.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 36.524 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.439 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.708 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, regarding, so, then, well, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99224806202 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97789464203 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.369509043928 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 611.1 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 77.0 22.8473053892 337% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.298172739 57.8364921388 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 386.4 119.503703932 323% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 77.4 23.324526521 332% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.6 5.70786347227 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309890291063 0.218282227539 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190537687239 0.0743258471296 256% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626760007429 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190537687239 0.128457276422 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626760007429 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.8 14.3799401198 284% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -6.68 48.3550499002 -14% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 33.3 12.197005988 273% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.85 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.32208582834 121% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 32.8 11.1389221557 294% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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