Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Humans always give more importance to their needs than those of other species on this planet.In my opinion, they certainly keep their need for land and resources at a higher priority than for the endangered animals. I feel this for two reasons which I will elaborate in the following essay.
First, land and houses have become a symbol of prosperity in our society. Humans have become greedy to acquire more wealth and keep themselves at a higher position than their competition. In doing so, they exploit land and animals for their materialistic profits. For example, my friend bought a piece of land in the outskirts of the city to build a farmhouse. When he visited the site he realized that it was a part of the natural habitat of a rare rabbit species that was local to that area. As the site was near an interstate highway it was a good deal. If it had not been for the rabbit habitat the property would be worth twice its current value.He decided to destroy the native rabbit population. Natives from that area protested against his activities but he still moved ahead with his plan of building his home there and destroyed the natural home of those rabbits. He was selfish to look at his own monetary gains and neglected the other species in that area.
Secondly, humans crave for attention and it is this habit that leads to them building factories and huge homes. Humans like to flaunt their wealth to each other. To gain this wealth and attention they exploit land from its precious minerals. The barren land cant produce crops anymore and hence affect the natural habitat of many species both plants and animals in that area.
Hence, we can say that the societal pressure of being wealthy and the need for attention have caused people to think for their needs for resources over the needs of other endangered animals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, for example, i feel, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72897196262 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34585024322 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535825545171 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.393990384 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.875 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233023693072 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743037242539 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677052707723 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165931722614 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631070005971 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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