An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The following argument presented by the author is flawed for various reasons. The argument makes a lot of unnecessary assumptions which when proved otherwise can certainly make the conclusion fall apart.
First of all, the author assumes that if farmers will be paid increased subsidies, then the farmers will practice growing more of the new varieties of millet and sell it. However it is nowhere mentioned that the farmers will sell the new millet at the same price as of old millet. Since the conclusion depends on people readily accepting this new variety of millet, then if proved less effective on people's acceptance of this variety will make conclusion fall apart. For example, if the farmers try to sell this new variety for higher price than the old one's, then the people will probably be reluctant to the new one's. Also, it is assumed in the argument that even when the copious amount of old millet is already in supply, it is possible that the varied taste of the new millet may not be liked by many people. Thus, conclusion will fall apart if this comes true.
Secondly, argument assumes that the government give subsidy to all the farmers to grow this new variety. Subsidies to all literally all farmers? What is the government budget in the agricultural sector? These factors are not mentioned in the argument. Also, it is assumed that people will find millet as an only source of vitamin A. What if other sources of vitamin A are available at a cheaper cost? If there is another source of millet in market at cheaper rate than people will definitely prefer the cheaper one. Hence, if the government promoted only this type of millet than it will be in loss.
Lastly, the financial and economical condition of the people is not known. What if majority of people may not be able to afford this variety of millet. For example, if the average household income of the country is low, then they would prefer cheaper variety food supply. Thus, the government objective will fail.
Since the argument depends on lots of unwarranted assumptions and conjecture, i cannot be safely said that new type of millet should be promoted to a large extent.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 373 350
No. of Characters: 1743 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.395 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.673 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.422 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.632 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.554 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ainly make the conclusion fall apart. First of all, the author assumes that if...
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Line 3, column 191, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...he new varieties of millet and sell it. However it is nowhere mentioned that the farmer...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n will fall apart if this comes true. Secondly, argument assumes that the gove...
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Line 5, column 387, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...min A. What if other sources of vitamin A are available at a cheaper cost? If there i...
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Line 5, column 422, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...amin A are available at a cheaper cost? If there is another source of millet in ma...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e of millet than it will be in loss. Lastly, the financial and economical con...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., the government objective will fail. Since the argument depends on lots of un...
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Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...unwarranted assumptions and conjecture, i cannot be safely said that new type of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 373.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79356568365 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46681137872 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45308310992 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.9582725947 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1428571429 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7619047619 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344154136033 0.218282227539 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104355477258 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781202599876 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167932881893 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101111269691 0.0628817314937 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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