An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of the argument claims that the government of the Tagus is in order to combat Vitamin A doing everything so that they can promote a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. To support his view, the author gives reference to an international development organization, who suggested that the Vitamin A deficiency among people can be improved by using new breed of millet high in vitamin A.
To determine the validity of the argument, we must understand that whether by promoting and using the new breed of millet will able to improve or not the condition of Tagus where the deficiency of vitamin A is high in number.
First, the author mentions that a new breed of millet that is high in vitamin A will improvise the condition but failed to mention that whether it will effective to all the age groups or limit to certain age groups or whether the millet has any side-effect or not. If these questions were answered in the argument than it will make the argument stronger.
Secondly, the author mentioned that the cost of the seeds of a new type of millet is high, so the farmer will get subsidies for the same. But giving subsidies will not solve the problem, the farmer should be taught how to plant these seeds and what kind of environment should be favorable for them to grow. The author should also answer the question like whether the farmer will get the profit by doing the farming of this millet or not.
Finally, he mentioned that people will readily adopt the new variety without providing any data or surveys that will support his claim. There may be a chance that the people will find other sources that will help them to overcome the problem of Vitamin A and what if the price of this millet would be so high that the poor will not able to buy it.
In sum, the author's argument was based on the uncleared and unsubstantiated assumptions. In order to evaluate the merit of the argument, we required more information and data about the point mentioned in the argument. To make the argument stronger the author should outline the real reason behind why Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1734 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.575 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.485 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.809 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.721 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.192 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aims that the government of the Tagus is in order to combat Vitamin A doing every...
^^
Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of Tagus where the deficiency of vitamin A is high in number. First, the aut...
^^
Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: high
...s where the deficiency of vitamin A is high in number. First, the author mentions that a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 246, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[14]
Message: Did you mean 'side effect' (=adverse effect, unintended consequence)? Open compounds are not hyphenated.
Suggestion: side effect
...ge groups or whether the millet has any side-effect or not. If these questions were answere...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 266, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the millet has any side-effect or not. If these questions were answered in the ar...
^^
Line 21, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the poor will not able to buy it. In sum, the authors argument was based o...
^^^^
Line 23, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ot able to buy it. In sum, the authors argument was based on the uncleared and...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 379.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71503957784 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5282277291 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445910290237 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.5187103371 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.461538462 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1538461538 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.218282227539 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0743258471296 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.128457276422 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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