An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The Government's decisions that it would whole-heartedly promote the new breed of millet, high in vitamin A in their country Tagus, where people are combating with its deficiency is based on various assumptions. There are three major loopholes here that the government need to consider upon before arriving on the decision of taking such action.
To start with, here, in the statement, government of Tagus has assumed that since millet is the staple food of the country therefore, people will readily accept the new type. However, the things that to be questioned whether the newly produced type of millet would produce the similar and familiar taste that of their regular millet? If not? Are the people of Tagus adaptable enough to except such changes? Generally people of an area who are habitual of certain taste would develop similar taste bud and liking and therefore, would not be able to adapt to changes in their food types so easily.
The above argument would bring us to our next point and it is, that government are deciding to give farmers subsidies to cultivate this new type of millet. However, if people would not be like the taste of new millet they would not buy it after the first time, and hence it could not yield much profit for the framers, which ultimately will bring financial loss to the already poor country. Therefore, the government should consider this factor and think how just and intelligent it is to invest in this new breed.
The reason for investing on this new type of millet will lead us to our next point that is - government should research first the actual cause of Vitamin A deficiency among citizens. How government could be sure that the old breed of millet was not rich enough in Vitamin A and hence causing deficiency of the vitamin among people? There is possibility that people are deficient in other nutrition that the body need to absorb and retain vitamin A from incoming food to our body. In this case, blaming regular breed for the deficiency is wrong. If this would be true, then the government could avoid a potential financial lose by investing in the expensive process of cultivating new millet type.
To recapitulate, there are series of areas (as discussed in above there paragraphs) that the government of Tagus need to research profoundly upon before starting investing in the developing, farming, marketing and selling process of the new expensive type of millet in their country.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 1985 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.783 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.48 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.756 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'decision'.
Suggestion: decision
The Governments decisions that it would whole-heartedly promote t...
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Line 13, column 449, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[3]
Message: Did you mean 'form'?
Suggestion: form
...ody need to absorb and retain vitamin A from incoming food to our body. In this case...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92289156627 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54198177934 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46265060241 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8076179453 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.2 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386339162205 0.218282227539 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135543276048 0.0743258471296 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774724722305 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215766970469 0.128457276422 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847383405546 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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