An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The response to the deficient of Vitamin A in the Tagus shows that the author encourages the government of Tagus to promote what was discovered as the new breed of millet which is found to be high in Vitamin A. The evidence provided is that since millet is regarded has the staple food in the Tagus then the adoption rate is high. However, the encouragement relies on several assumption that needs to be questioned. Will international development organization not come about another solution which is more effective to give Vitamin A than the millet? and if they cannot, how about the cost of producing this millet? the conditions at which this millet is produced? also, seasonal availability of the millet.
Firstly, the author made a jump by encouraging government to invest in this particular millet neglecting that more research could arised which will be more effective. Perhaps, he felt investing on the millet foods first will go along way before realizing another development and, due to the staple of the millet foods in the community. Then, the government Tagus should promote the millet. However, this is not the case most times. The present sweetness might lead to future struggle. The International development organization should give the recommendation of which breed is better in Vitamin A. Even the Tagus might have the other type of millet which will be better than this new millet just gotten or the older one that has been existing might be a better option.
Another perspectives that the author seems to neglect is the seasonal appearance or conditions of every seeds germination. The cost of producing the seeds might be much as stated by the author. Also, the seasonal condition of the seeds is more paramount because, what is the essence of investment that eventually resulted to unused for the purpose. That is what will results if the seeds where planted at wrong time and investment started without this consideration.
Therefore, the author needs to take some consideration more insightful before encouraging the government of Tagus to invest on the new researched millet.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 347 350
No. of Characters: 1723 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.316 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.965 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.767 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.143 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 369, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...h. However, the encouragement relies on several assumption that needs to be questioned. Will inter...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 552, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...tive to give Vitamin A than the millet? and if they cannot, how about the cost of p...
^^^
Line 1, column 617, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...bout the cost of producing this millet? the conditions at which this millet is prod...
^^^
Line 1, column 666, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...tions at which this millet is produced? also, seasonal availability of the millet. ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 105, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'seeds'' or 'seed's'?
Suggestion: seeds'; seed's
...sonal appearance or conditions of every seeds germination. The cost of producing the ...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 368, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...used for the purpose. That is what will results if the seeds where planted at wrong tim...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09798270893 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83415878977 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463976945245 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.7660431365 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1052631579 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2631578947 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84210526316 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396257105204 0.218282227539 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118668514464 0.0743258471296 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782428435031 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235084898148 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111136051256 0.0628817314937 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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