A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. At present, the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. In addition, there is ample evidence of the popularity of jazz in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.' Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument that the jazz club the C-note should be established relies on some assumptions that are not completely sound. In order for it to be possible to evaluate the efficacy of the proposal, additional evidence is needed to fill the gaps in the reasoning. Below, I adress three points of evidence that would help strenghten the argument.
First, the argument states that if the club was established, it would have all of the local market to itself. The assumption of this asseration, however, is that consumers consider jazz as a separate good to all other entertainment. This is not possible to claim without further evidence. More detailed data as to what extent people consider jazz clubs interchangeable to other forms of evening entertainment would therefore help evaluate the argument. If those who are interested in jazz consisder it a separate thing entirely, the argument is strenghtned, and if they consider it merely one of several possible ways of spending an evening the argument is weakened, as it means that the C-note will face harder competition.
Second, the argument cites the amount of people that attend the annual jazz festival as evidence that there is demand for the club. This assumes, however, that the people who attend the festival are locals. It seems a priori plausible that people from other cities would also attend the festival, which would undermine the argument, as people from other cities are not as likely to come to Monroe just to attend a club. Hence, data on how much of the local populaition as opposed to people coming from the outside that attend the festival would help strenghten the argument, particularly if it is compared to Monroe’s population. If a significant amount of people, compared to the population of Monroe, attend the festival the argument’s conclusion would be strenghted, and if it turns out that most of the people come from other places, it is weakened.
Third, the argument cites the popularity of a radio show as evidence that there is demand for a jaz club. This however relies on the assumption that people listen to the radio show for the particular characteristic of jazz and not for some other reason. As the program is aired around the same time as people get home from work, it seems plausible that it might be the most popular simply because of the fact that a lot of people have the radio on at that time. Another possible reason is that the program has other characteristics that make it better than the competition, like good hosts. At least, we cannot rule those possibilities out without further investigation of the listening habits and opinion polls of why people listen to that radio station in particular.
Ultimately, the argument is therefore not convincing without further evidence. If evidence was gathered as to the elasticity of substitution for jazz as a good as compared to other forms of entertainment, the specific breakdown of the atendeed of the annual festival, and other possible factors that could theoretically explain the success of the radio station, we would be able to evaluate the argument’s conclusion more thoroughly.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Below, I adress three points of evidence that would help strenghten the argument.
Error: strenghten Suggestion: strengthen
Error: adress Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The assumption of this asseration, however, is that consumers consider jazz as a separate good to all other entertainment.
Error: asseration Suggestion: assertion
Sentence: If those who are interested in jazz consisder it a separate thing entirely, the argument is strenghtned, and if they consider it merely one of several possible ways of spending an evening the argument is weakened, as it means that the C-note will face harder competition.
Error: strenghtned Suggestion: strengthened
Error: consisder Suggestion: consider
Sentence: Hence, data on how much of the local populaition as opposed to people coming from the outside that attend the festival would help strenghten the argument, particularly if it is compared to Monroe's population.
Error: strenghten Suggestion: strengthen
Error: populaition Suggestion: population
Sentence: If a significant amount of people, compared to the population of Monroe, attend the festival the argument's conclusion would be strenghted, and if it turns out that most of the people come from other places, it is weakened.
Error: strenghted Suggestion: strengthen
Sentence: Third, the argument cites the popularity of a radio show as evidence that there is demand for a jaz club.
Error: jaz Suggestion: jar
Sentence: If evidence was gathered as to the elasticity of substitution for jazz as a good as compared to other forms of entertainment, the specific breakdown of the atendeed of the annual festival, and other possible factors that could theoretically explain the success of the radio station, we would be able to evaluate the argument's conclusion more thoroughly.
Error: atendeed Suggestion: attended
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 523 350
No. of Characters: 2555 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.782 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.885 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.733 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.431 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 77, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...the club was established, it would have all of the local market to itself. The assumption ...
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Line 4, column 390, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...hat it might be the most popular simply because of the fact that a lot of people have the radio on at th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 771, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en to that radio station in particular. Ultimately, the argument is therefore no...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, as to, at least, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 16.3942115768 213% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2632.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 523.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03250478011 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90215940951 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.413001912046 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.0954683958 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.6 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.15 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224370044257 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788948775172 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670315747711 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148409845959 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649435704931 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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