Last year PrepUp had record enrollment in their test prep courses, but yearly profits fell by nearly 30 percent. To the contrary, TopPreparation had comparable enrollment to the year be fore, with profits rising by approximately 20 percent. This discrepancy most likely results from the fact that PrepUp teaches only live, in-person classes, which require expensive rental spaces and teaching equipment. Although TopPreparation’s total enrollment remained unchanged, its online enrollment increased by 50 percent, and online classes have a much lower overhead. In order to address these issues of profitability in the coming year, PrepUp will begin offering online test prep courses.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether PrepUp’s plan for the coming year and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the plan
The prompt presents that top preparation enrolled 50% more online students than previous year to get higher profit than previous year and suggest PrepUp should adopt online class to solve the profit issue as it higher enrollment of students yielded lower profit than previous year. There should be answer that whether the said profit percentage increase or decreased had also increased or decreased the overall profit. Furthermore, the higher number of student enrolled in online and it gave us not only more profit percent but also did insured higher profit amount should be stated. And, a big question a plan which suceeded last year for other institue may no be equally effective this year for us.
The assumption that the shown higher profit percentage can be considered better. Let say, Top preparation had 20% increase in 1000 dollars whereas PrepUp has decrease on 100000 dollar, if this is the case going like Top preparation is deleterious for the business of Prepup. The facts should be clearly stated for this and if this left as sweeping as it is next year plan could ruin the profit amount.
In addition to this, we are not lucid on the fact that the Top preparation made more enrollment in online classes and get more amount of profit than the ordinary classes. Provided that the online had less enrollment fee and only gave higher profit percentage but a lower sum overall, then it is a stupid decision to adopt that plan. For instance, a business investment of 20000 dollars at 30 percents gives higher yield than 1000 dollar 20 investment at 5 percent. Thus, the amount of profit should be considered if not PrepUp might face a loss this year.
The consideration of time is also fallacious on the topic, if a process earned some result in last year scenario, this year as the scenario is changed the result can be far beyond expectation. This year people or students might not be interested in the online class as their results may not have proven well. This year tha cost for electricity and internet billing might make the unprofit able. All in all, we should make sure the condition not change as of last year and had the condition change the plan is certain to fail.
In this way, the exact amount of profit should be determined to make the plans, this is because of the facts the profit percentage assumed is ceratinlu doutable. The time frame change effect should be considered to make the plan work well.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: And, a big question a plan which suceeded last year for other institue may no be equally effective this year for us.
Error: suceeded Suggestion: succeeded
Error: institue Suggestion: institute
Sentence: This year tha cost for electricity and internet billing might make the unprofit able.
Error: tha Suggestion: than
Error: internet Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: unprofit Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In this way, the exact amount of profit should be determined to make the plans, this is because of the facts the profit percentage assumed is ceratinlu doutable.
Error: ceratinlu Suggestion: certainly
Error: doutable Suggestion: doubtable
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correct arguments should be something like:
1. maybe other reasons caused the difference
2. maybe it works only for last year
3. it works for A, while it may now work for B
...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 1971 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.671 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.405 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.191 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'answered'?
Suggestion: answered
...fit than previous year. There should be answer that whether the said profit percentage...
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Line 1, column 345, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that whether the said profit percentage increase or decreased had also increased...
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Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sed the overall profit. Furthermore, the higher number of student enrolled in onl...
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Line 1, column 497, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tudent enrolled in online and it gave us not only more profit percent but also di...
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Line 1, column 540, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot only more profit percent but also did insured higher profit amount should be s...
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Line 1, column 542, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'insure'
Suggestion: insure
... only more profit percent but also did insured higher profit amount should be stated. ...
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Line 1, column 664, Rule ID: NOW[3]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ceeded last year for other institue may no be equally effective this year for us. ...
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Line 2, column 177, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...s whereas PrepUp has decrease on 100000 dollar, if this is the case going like Top pre...
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Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...should be considered if not PrepUp might face a loss this year. The consideratio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, thus, well, whereas, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77014218009 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43681755217 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457345971564 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9546507147 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.411764706 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8235294118 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355303438958 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126010320913 0.0743258471296 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474832004787 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212824584712 0.128457276422 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664369416641 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.