"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read
Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was
able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an
assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you
can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read
costs only $500 per employee---a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme.
Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the
Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to
take the Easy Read course."
In these memo, the author of the Acme Publishing Company claims that Acme would benefit all of their employee to take the Easy Read Course to speed of their performance and the course costs only $500 per employee for three week periods. To bolster the claim, the author cites the following facts about Acme Company: (1) one graduate of the course was able to read a five hundred page report in only two hours (2) another graduate rose from an assistant manager to the vice president of the company under a year. Close scrutiny of each of these facts however reveals that none of them lends no credible evidence to support the claim.
First, the argument readily assumes that taking Acme Publishing Company English Course will speed of the employee performance, which in turn increase the productivity of the whole company. If this is the case, then every employee will enhance their reading skills up to the acme level. Only considering the speed reading technique does not fully endorse the performance of employee. Before considering such approach, the initial background and base of the students should be accounted. The reason behind such consideration is that students with goad base in education side may simply cope up with course offered by the company. Thus, the argument fails to mention the appropriate criteria of employee regarding their initial framework.
Secondly, the argument could have been much clearer if the company mention the particular skills provided to the students to enhance their reading skills. Moreover, what sort of tutor they provided to the students are also lacking behind the information provided in the given argument. Therefore, considering the achievement of few students regarding the verbal skills doesn't match with the performance of all the students. Therefore, the argument remains obscure and dubious and doesn't lends sufficient viable evidence to buttress the claim.
Finally, the argument fails to mention one of the key factors on the basis of which it could have been evaluated, only providing the success story of single employee doesn't compensate the success of all employees. Therefore, several success story of different employee should be rendered so that other employee will be motivated enough to take such courses. Therefore, the whole argument remains unsubstantiated and become open to debate.
To sum up, the argument relies on dubious assumption that renders unconvincing as it stands. To bolster the claim, the author should provide clear evidence perhaps by a local study or survey; numerous teaching methods should be mentioned so as to allure employee to take such course, different success stories should be disseminated so as to motivate the employee and what sort of other services are lacking to motivate employee should be checked.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2305 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.077 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.575 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.757 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this memo' or 'these memos'?
Suggestion: this memo; these memos
In these memo, the author of the Acme Publishing Comp...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ead Course to speed of their performance and the course costs only 00 per employe...
^^
Line 1, column 317, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he following facts about Acme Company: 1 one graduate of the course was able to r...
^^
Line 1, column 509, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
... president of the company under a year. Close scrutiny of each of these facts however reveals ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... will speed of the employee performance, which in turn increase the productivity ...
^^
Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ew students regarding the verbal skills doesnt match with the performance of all the s...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rgument remains obscure and dubious and doesnt lends sufficient viable evidence to but...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ng the success story of single employee doesnt compensate the success of all employees...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 239, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...us teaching methods should be mentioned so as to allure employee to take such course, di...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 334, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... success stories should be disseminated so as to motivate the employee and what sort of ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, sort of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2357.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22616407982 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63450466778 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487804878049 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.5226519953 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.944444444 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0555555556 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241808582227 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683981436665 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807431074581 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128619769303 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945447411382 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.