Milk and dairy products are rich in vitamin D and calcium - substances essential for building and maintaining bones.Many people therefore say that a diet rich in dairy products can help prevent osteoporosis, a disease that is linked to both environmental and genetic factors and that causes the bones to weaken significantly with age.But a long-term study of a large number of people found that those who consistently consumed dairy products throughout the years of the study have a higher rate of bone fractures than any other participants in the study.Since bone fractures are symptomatic of osteoporosis, this study result shows that a diet rich in dairy products may actually increase, rather than decrease, the risk of osteoporosis.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The arguments states that milk and dairy are adundant sources of vitamin D and calcium that are essential of maintaining bones. and states many people think that diet reach in milk is helpful in preventing in osteoporisis which causes the weakening of bones. but another study contradicts the above mentioning the that people with high milk intake suffer from more bine frcatures thus this study concludes that higher amount of milk consumption leads to more proneness towards to osteoporosis. The above argument makes an number of unwarranted claims regarding the effects of milk on the prevention of ostepeorosis also makes an vague assumptions regarding its adverse effects on the body.
Firstly, The author claims that the osteoporisis can be prevented from taking a diet high in vitamin D and calcium which is not backed by providing evidence that the cause a decline in the rate of occurence of disease. it also does not mention the required quantity of vitamin D and calcium as glut quantity can have other noxious effects on the body as well. also the argument states that "many people says" which means that credentials of the person is not presented maybe the persons do not have any insights of the effects and not qualified to make any comments in the topics. also it may be the case where the statement is a myth.
Secondly,The author claims that the diseases is related to effects from genetics and enviroment if that is the cause it would be futile increase the intake the calcium and vitamins D as the major cause of the disease is environment or genetics and increasing the calcium intake will have no effect preventing the disease.
Thirdly, The argument states that survey was done on a large number of people but does not diverse people involved in the survey maybe the rate of osteoporsis in that the particular region is higher than the rest of the area. also it states that people have consisentently consumed high amount of dairy products which seem vague maybe the people might have consumed higher amount of dairy products which nullifies the major assumptions. also the higher rate of bone fractures is not related to their intake of dairy products, maybe the survey was done on majority of person involved in bone fractures thus is not considered a valid or effecient survey as it does not take into account the people who consume diary product and did not have bone fractures through there life span.
Finally, The author makes a broader conclusion based on the result of the survey stating that the dairy products intake increases the risk of the disease which is not backed by any evidence also the survey on which the assumption is made sounds specious thus the conclusion made is unjustifiable.
The argument seems to fall apart if the points presented by the author are not backed by evidence and comprehensive research The argument given by the author sounds vague. To identify the causes that the dairy products have and its relation with osteoporsis more extensive research has to be done.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2584.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02723735409 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60601642254 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.398832684825 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.5005089589 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.266666667 119.503703932 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2666666667 23.324526521 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 5.15768463074 446% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230738781993 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885262699728 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727066328719 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0693385391364 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684939121376 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.3799401198 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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