It is inevitable that the vitamin D contributes in making the bone stronger. Also, milk and the dairy products are prosperous in vitamin D and calcium; which are responsible for building bone of the body. Here, the author is not sure about the research; he has carried out. It might contain some flaws regarding the assumption he has made on the research topic. The assumptions made on the topic results in the harm to the bone and it states that the bone gets damaged consuming the milk and the dairy product. The assumption made regarding the weakness of bone might require more research with large sample group.
The author has mistaken in the milk and the milk product, he might have included the beverage product which are made from milk to. The beverage are not considered a healthy drink as it is a product of a company which might not be safe to drink as it is prepared adding different chemicals. Also, the author has not stated the number of sampling survey he has conducted to record the result and stated the fact. He might have done the small sample survey which might include adult only. This one is also the great challenge in the survey.
The sample must be carried out considering large number of people with varied age group. The adult ones are more likely to suffer from injuries than the child and the adults. Also, the type of injuries are not listed properly which are occurred. Only the reason listed as it occurred still after consuming the milk and the dairy product are rich in vitamin D.
The facture can be caused by different reasons; it might be caused while climbing a tree, road accident or anything else. Thus, we can be caused by consuming vitamin D; a rich contain from milk and dairy product.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1391 1500
No. of Different Words: 136 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.516 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.263 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 92 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.159 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.43 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.184 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ore research with large sample group. The author has mistaken in the milk and the...
^^^
Line 2, column 132, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ge product which are made from milk to. The beverage are not considered a healthy d...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, still, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 308.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62337662338 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30729737659 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461038961039 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.231565628 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.7647058824 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1176470588 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82352941176 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227346845408 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813162975973 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108542523006 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142090912212 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437654726392 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.3550499002 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.197005988 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 12.5979740519 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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