In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for the plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer a significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based on are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answer to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author recommends to the City Council to organize a campaign to attract Autotech and offer them a huge tax incentive in order to resolve the issue of unemployment. The author reaches this conclusion by stating the building and staffing of the new automobile plant by Autotech will employ thousands of Hillview residents. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated three questions must be answered.
First, does Autotech have an interest in building a new automobile plant? In the argument, the author prematurely assumes organizing a campaign and offering huge tax cuts will automatically attract Autotech to build a new plant in Hillview. While this sounds like a tempting offer, what if the company refuses it? It is possible Autotech is currently building a new automobile plant in another location that has taken most of their yearly budget, hence, they won’t be able to finance another building project. Or perharps, Autotech prefers to site its plants in urban areas whereas Hillview is a rural area. If any of these are true, then the author’s argument is significantly weakened.
Moving on, what is the current unemployment rate in Hillview? The author states that when Computech computer left its national facility last year, thousands of Hillview residents lost their jobs. While that may be true, the author wrongly assumes what applies last year still applies this year. While it’s possible thousands of people are still unemployed, it’s also possible only a few people are-say hundreds, or nobody is even unemployed. Perhaps, after Computech computer folded up, another company took its place and hired Hillview residents. Or unemployed Hillview residents decided to relocate to another town to seek new job opportunities. If any of these are true, the author’s recommendation is weakened because Autotech will have little or no one to employ.
Lastly, how large is Autotech? This question is valid in determining the building and hiring strengths of the company. While it’s possible Autotech is a giant car manufacturer, the author doesn’t provide any proof to support this. Perhaps Autotech is just a small time company, relatively new in the game, and may not have the resources to build a car plant in Hillview. And if the company can’t do that, there’s no way they can hire residents of Hillview. Therefore, the issue of unemployment persists, and the author’s stance is seriously undermined.
In conclusion, the author’s recommendation, as it stands, is deeply flawed because they are based on unwarranted assumptions. For the author’s recommendation to be properly evaluated, he/she has to provide detailed answers to the above questions, perhaps in the form of a survey or report with relevant data or figures.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 445 350
No. of Characters: 2258 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.593 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.074 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.803 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.542 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: ITS_JJ_NNSNN[27]
Message: Did you mean 'its possible thousands'?
Suggestion: its possible thousands
...ast year still applies this year. While it’s possible thousands of people are still unemployed, it’s al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, so, still, then, therefore, whereas, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2353.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32352941176 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93703589506 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52036199095 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0729153458 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0416666667 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4166666667 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190935789254 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588241652736 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590432790558 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107166002842 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609554484076 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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